Question

【题目】【广州市2015年初中毕业生学业考试英语】书面表达（共1题，满分15分） 你校将开设一些特色课程，学生可根据兴趣进行选择。请根据以下内容提示为学校英文网页写一篇短文，介绍这些课程、提出你建议增设的课程并说明理由。

Students in our school are free to choose some special courses according to their interest. …

注意：1. 参考词汇：模型制作 model making

2. 词数80左右（文章开头已给出，不计入词数）；

3. 不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。

Answer 1

【答案】

Students in our school are free to choose some special courses according to their interest. These courses will help students relax themselves after school. There are many courses for them to choose, such as English drama, football, or model making. Here is more information.

If you want to improve your oral English, English drama may be the first choice. It is a good chance to practice not only oral English, but also performing skills. If you are interested in football, take the football course. It is good for your physical health. Besides, you can learn more about teamwork. What about model making? You will be amazed by the science world and become interested in it.

For my part, a painting course can be added, because students like drawing so much. I hope these courses would be helpful and each student would enjoy a bright and colorful school life here!

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇命题作文，需要我们来介绍学校即将开设的一些特色课程，如足球、英语戏团、模型制作等，还需要我们建议一门课程。题目中给出了这些课程的一些活动的内容及特色，我们需要用正确的英语将这些内容表达出来，第四项课程需要我们发挥想象力，自己来说明课程的活动内容和目的。通过分析可知，这篇短文我们应主要使用一般现在时态，第二人称you来叙述。写作时，要注意表达合乎英语的规范，注意语句之间的连接，尽量使用一些好的词汇、句型和短语，增强文章的表现力，使文章意思更加连贯，表达更加流畅。

写作亮点：这是一篇优秀的范文。短文中作者按照题目的要求给我们介绍了学校即将开设的三个特色课程的活动内容，又发挥想象力补充了第四个课程painting course,内容完整，要点全面，语句通顺，符合题目要求。短文中作者使用了正确的时态和人称，句式表达符合英语的规范。作者还使用了丰富的句型和句式，如here are many courses for them to choose, such as English drama, football, or model making、It is a good chance to practice not only oral English, but also performing skills.、Besides, you can learn more about teamwork、For my part, a painting course can be added, because students like drawing so much等。这些句型的使用从整体上提高了作文的档次，显示了作者较高的写作能力。