Question

【题目】.如今,国内外很多孩子在父母的安排下没有了自己的周末,如下图中的Jack。请分析图中的这种现象并谈谈你的看法,以 Weekend or Not?为题写一篇约110词的英语短文向 Parents杂志投稿,让父母们通过阅读你的文章能有所启发。

注意:文中若出现“Jack"以外的人名或任何学校名称,该作文得分不超过12分。

Weekend or Not?

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Answer 1

【答案】Weekend or Not?

Jack has to attend lots of classes at weekends. He has little time for his favorite sport-soccer. Still, his parents are pushing him to do more math exercises, which worries him a lot.

Nowadays, many students are under much pressure like Jack. Their parents believe it necessary for them to make full use of the weekends and learn as much as possible. As a result, some students are stressed out and therefore lose interest in learning anything. What is worse, they may not be able to learn to manage their own life.

I do hope all the children can have the freedom to choose what they like to do and enjoy their weekends.

【解析】写作这篇文章需要写一篇稿件，稿件的主题是讨论当下父母把儿童的周末都安排满是否可行，写作的目的是让父母们通过阅读你的文章能有所启发。要注意的是写作的时候不能脱离漫画，不能脱离里面的任务Jack，看似是一篇议论题材的文章，但是要关注漫画，简单介绍漫画中Jack的生活，通过Jack引出自己的观点，讨论这样做的劣势在哪里，最后最后表达出自己的期望，写作要注意逻辑性，分段要合理。

写作亮点：首段用几句话简单描述了漫画，用到了一些较好的短语（attend lots of classes，has little time for…，pushing him to do，worries him a lot），这些短语运用准确，能使文章首段非常有吸引力。第二段描述了自己的观点，使用了一些议论文常用的句式（…believe it necessary for … to…，As a result, What is worse,），文章末尾有自己的希望，清晰简练地表达了自己的观点。总体来说这篇文章分段清晰，每段功能准确，表意明确，有一定的说理性，完成了既定的写作任务。