Question

【题目】（深圳市宝安中学2017-2018年度初三期中）你叫James，是初三的一名学生，你的好朋友Joyce近期很烦恼，她上周日因为使用手机的问题与她父亲发生了争吵，她父亲把她手机都摔坏了。她这几天情绪很低落，学习不认真，你很担心她，所以你给她写了一封信。

要点：

1. 你非常理解她的感受。

2.对她的问题提出至少两点建议。

注意：

1. 词数：80词左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）；

2. 文章必须包含所有提示内容，并可适当发挥；

3. 文中不得出现真实姓名和校名；

4. 条理清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯，书写规范。

参考词汇：1. have a quarrel与……吵架 2. treat 对待 3. affect 影响

Dear Joyce,

I am so sorry to hear that you had a quarrel with your father and he even broke your smart phone.

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Best wishes!

Yours,

James

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Joyce,

I am so sorry to hear that you had a quarrel with your father and he even broke your smart phone.

I can fully understand your feelings. We want to depend more on ourselves but sometimes our parents still treat us like a primary school student. You have different opinions on using a smart phone with your father. I think your father is worried that using a smart phone may affect your study. After all, we are in Grade 9 and we must try our best to study. Here I have two suggestions for you.

First, you should find a chance to communicate with your father when you both calm down. If you don’t want to talk to him, you can write a letter or an email to him.

Second, I think you should forget this unhappy thing and start to study hard again. Time is very valuable for us, so we can’t afford to waste it .Please raise your spirits!

Best wishes!

Yours,

James

【解析】这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。文中使用了非常好的短语，例如be sorry to do，have a quarrel with，want to do，depend on，have different opinions on sth.，after all，try our best to study，communicate with sb.，talk to sb.，start to do，can’t afford to等。而We want to depend more on ourselves but sometimes our parents still treat us like a primary school student. I think your father is worried that using a smart phone may affect your study. / If you don’t want to talk to him, you can write a letter or an email to him.等多种从句结构的运用，使本文内容丰富，表达流畅；同时，Firstly、Secondly等词使文章层次清晰、叙述自然，是本文的亮点所在。