Question

18．亲爱的同学，随着你走出本次中考的考场，初中的学习生活就结束了．迎接你的将是近两个月的轻松假期．你想好要在假期中做什么了吗？跟我们分享你的假期计划吧！请以"My summer vacation"为题，用英文写一篇短文．
要点提示：
1．和父母去海南（Hainan）旅游；
2．看电视、听音乐（listen to）；
3．看书、做些家务（housework）；
4．参考（take part in）一些有意义的活动（meaningful activities），比如和同学去养老院（the Old People's Home）看望老人，去农村（the countryside）看望留守儿童（the left-behind children）等；
5．你的假期将是丰富多彩的（be colorful）．
要求：
1．文中不得出现考生真实的姓名、地点和所在学校的名称；
2．词数不少于70个，短文题目和开头已经给出，不计入总词数；
3．短文应包含以上所有要点，还可以适当发挥．
My summer vacation
The summer vacation is coming．What are you going to do this vacation？I'm going to Hainan with my parents this summer．I will visit some places of great interest．I am looking forward to meeting the beautiful sea beaches．
Also，I want to watch TV or listen to music that I like in my spear time．I really want to relax
myself．Of course，I will read some books that I want to read．I will also help my parents to do housework．
Besides，I want to take part in a meaningful activity．I want to go to the countryside to visit the left-behind children．I hope I can help them with their homework．and I also hope I can bring them happiness．
I think my holiday will be colorful．I hope I can have a happy vacation．What about you？What are you going to do this summer？．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是以"My summer vacation"为题分享你的假期计划．时态主要为一般将来时及一般现在时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1外出旅行，和父母去海南（Hainan）旅游；
2平时生活，看电视、听音乐，看书、做些家务
3参加活动，参加一些有意义的活动，比如和同学去养老院看望老人，去农村看望留守儿童
4对自己假期的评价，你的假期将是丰富多彩的
常用到的重点短语：
be going to 打算…
look forward to 期待
help sb to do sth 帮助某人做某事
take part in 参加
【高分句型】
1．I am looking forward to meeting the beautiful sea beaches．
look forward to doing sth 期待做某事
2．Also，I ①want to watch TV or listen to music②that I like in my spear time．
①want to do sth 想要做某事
②that作为关系词的定语从句，that作为从句的宾语．修饰先行词music．
3．①Of course，I will read some books ②that I want to read
①Of course当然，做插入语．
②that作为关系词的定语从句，that作为从句的宾语．修饰先行词books．

解答 My summer vacation
The summer vacation is coming．What are you going to do this vacation？I'm going to Hainan with my parents this summer．I will visit some places of great interest．I am looking forward to meeting the beautiful sea beaches．【高分句型】（外出旅行）
Also，I want to watch TV or listen to music that I like in my spear time．【高分句型】I really want to relax myself．Of course，I will read some books that I want to read．【高分句型】I will also help my parents to do housework．（平时生活）
Besides，I want to take part in a meaningful activity．I want to go to the countryside to visit the left-behind children．I hope I can help them with their homework．and I also hope I can bring them happiness．（参加活动）
I think my holiday will be colorful．I hope I can have a happy vacation．（对自己假期的评价）What about you？What are you going to do this summer？

点评 这是一篇利用提纲的给材料作文．所给的材料主要分以下几个个方面：外出旅行，平时生活，参加活动，对自己假期的评价．根据介绍的是将来的假期活动可知主要用一般将来时态．在写作中注意句式的变化，连词的应用及上下文的衔接．写作亮点：这篇短文分四部分描述了自己的假期计划．第一部分介绍自己将要去哪里旅行，第二部分是自己的日常计划，第三部分是想参加的有意义的活动，最后一部分总体评价自己的假期．短文内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚、完整．用到了Also，Besides，及定语从句I want to watch TV or listen to music that I like in my spear time等这写使文章的表达更丰富，更有逻辑性，更富有条理．