Question

本学期，在学生处的带领下，我们育英学子展开“育英梦，我的梦”的圆梦活动，学期过半，学期初你所指定的梦想完成的如何，请你以“my dream ”为题写一篇短文。

Everyone has a lot of dreams. ____________________________________

Answer 1

My Dream

Everyone has a lot of dreams. Some people want to be rich, dreaming of becoming millionaires overnight. Others want to be famous, dreaming of suddenly jumping to great fame. I have a lot of dreams, too. When I was a young girl, I dreamed of becoming a scientist like Hua Luogen in future. However, I knew very well that I could not succeed without painstaking efforts. So I studied hard in the middle school and college in order to attain my goal.After graduating from college, I found a job as a teacher. Although I was very busy with teaching, I never gave up my goal. I read a lot of books to get more knowledge. I made experiments to practise and apply what I had learnt from the books. Sometimes, I was so deeply indulged in my research that I forgot my meals and time. Now I have made great progress. Several of my research papers have been published. The methods proposed in my papers have been proven to be valuable for the solution of some problems. I am very happy.The ladder of becoming a scientist is still far ahead, but I have climbed the first rung anyway.

【解析】

试题分析：根据所给材料可知这是一篇命题作文，动笔前首先根据主题组织材料，确定写作内容。写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上；结合材料内容，可知本文主要是第一人称，一般现在时态进行叙述。语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯。适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】这篇短文包含了所有要点，能围绕内容要点适当发挥，内容具体、丰富。应用了较丰富的语言结构和词汇，用词准确、句子通顺、行文连贯、表达清楚，具有较强的语言运用能力。层次清晰，语言地道，主题鲜明，内容翔实，格式正确，结构紧凑。使用了一些比较好的字句。比如：dream of，梦想；in order to，为了；so……that……等。学习中注意总结,牢记一些固定句式及短语,写作时就可以适当引用, 让文章更出彩。