Question

假如你是林思，要去澳大利亚的Melbourne High留学，需要在当地找一个寄宿家庭（host family).请按要求写一封约100词的电子邮件给寄宿家庭中介公司的经理Mr. Porter.
内容包括：（1）简单介绍自己的个人情况，如语言，爱好等
（2）提出自己的对寄宿家庭的要求（如下表所示）

Family member	English speaker ,no smoker
Housing	Near the school,a bedroom with a bathroom
Others	Cooking by myself……

 
注意：邮件需涵盖以上所有要点，可适当发挥；开头和结尾已给出（不计入总词汇）；文中不能出现真实的人名和校名等相关信息。
Dear Mr Porter,
My name is Li Si,__________________________________
_________________________________________________________________________________________
Look forward to your early reply.
Best wishes,
Lin Si

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Porter,
My name is Lin Si. I’m a sixteen-year-old boy from China. I’m going to study in Melbourne High.
I like making friends. English is my favorite subject but I’m weak in spoken English. That’s why I want to find a host family who are native English speakers. In this way, I will have more chances to practice English in daily life. I hope it’s a family without smokers. Moreover, it’s better if the family lives within a twenty-minute walk from my school and provides a bedroom with a bathroom. As for the meals, I’d like to cook by myself because I’m fond of cooking.
Look forward to your early reply.
Best wishes,
Lin Si

试题分析：这篇作文给我们设置的情景是以林思的身份写一封电子邮件，因为你要去澳大利亚留学，要在当地找一个寄宿家庭，给寄宿家庭的中介Porter现在写一封电子邮件。在这篇作文中应该主要有两个内容，一是介绍一下自己的基本情况；二是介绍自己对寄宿家庭的要求，这一部分在表格中给我们列举了出来。我们需要用正确的英语将这两部分内容表达出来。当然我们还可以对这两部分内容进行补充，使文章的内容更具体，更丰富。这篇文章我们应主要使用一般现在时，第一人称来叙述。注意语句之间的连接，多使用好的句型和短语，以使表达流畅。
【亮点说明】这是一篇优秀的作文。短文的作者按照题目的要求写了一封完整的电子邮件，内容丰富，表达流畅。首先作者先介绍了自己的一些情况，如I’m a sixteen-year-old boy from China、I like making friends. English is my favorite subject but I’m weak in spoken English等；然后作者提出了对寄宿家庭的要求，如I want to find a host family who are native English speakers、Moreover, it’s better if the family lives within a twenty-minute walk from my school and provides a bedroom with a bathroom等。短文中使用了比较多的短语和句式，如That’s why I want to find a host family who are native English speakers.中，表语从句和定语从句的使用；in this way, I will have more chances to practice English in daily life中，句型have chance to do sth.；短语moreover、as for等。