Question

书面表达： 假如你是张军，几年来，你有了很大的变化，不仅从外貌，性格有变化，而且你在老师和同学们的帮助下，由一个“问题学生”变成一名深受老师和同学们喜欢的学生，请根据表格提供的信息，描述你的变化，可适当发挥。80字左右。

In the past	Now
个子很矮	个子高
内向，不敢在公众场合发言	外向，有许多朋友
经常迟到	按时上学，认真听讲
和同学打架	经常帮助人
不按时完成作业	遵守学校纪律

How I’ve changed!

My name is Zhang Jun.. My life has changed a lot in the last few years.

Answer 1

How I’ve changed!

My name is Zhang Jun.. My life has changed a lot in the last few years. In the past, I was short, introvert and I was afraid to speak in public. At that time I was often late for school and never finished homework on time. However, since with the help from my teachers and classmates, I have made a great change.

And now I have grown much taller. And now I’ve become extrovert so that I have made many friends. Moreover, now I go to school on time and listen to the class carefully everyday. Today I often offer to help others and obey the school rules.

Now I really enjoy myself and I like the change that I’ve made very much. At last I want to thank for my dear teachers and classmates. Without them, I can never imagine how I will become. So thanks again, my dears!

【解析】

试题分析：这篇短文要求我们以“how I’ve changed”?为题写一篇作文，即我是怎样改变的。在题目中给了我们这篇短文的写作提纲，主要包括两大部分的内容。一是描述过去的自己；另一个是描述做了改变后的自己。提纲虽然已经列好，但是很多内容都需要我们自己去充实，让它变得完整、合理，内容丰富，这就需要花费我们的想象力，以及我们平时积累的知识。另外，写作时，还需注意语句间的衔接，使文意连贯，表达流畅。

【亮点说明】这是一篇比较不错的作文。作者从过去、现在两个方面，分成三段，讲述了自己的过去和现在的变化。这些内容都比较贴合文章的需要，意思也很连贯。文章中还用了一些比较好的句型，如Today I often offer to help others and obey the school rules等。

考点：提纲类作文。