Question

书面表达（30）

假如你是李华，你的笔友Jim最近沉溺于玩电脑游戏，为此你很担心。请根据下表提示给Jim 写一封信，谈谈你的看法及建议。

Jim 过去	功课好，积极参加学校的各项活动。
Jim 现在	对学习没兴趣，上课不专心，不按时交作业。
你的看法	玩电脑游戏可能使你放松，但……
你的建议	（至少发挥两点）

要求：1．词数80左右。2．要点完整，层次清楚，语法正确。

Dear Jim,

I really feel worried about you．

_____________________________________________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________

Yours

Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Jim,

I really feel worried about you. You used to do well in your lessons and took an active part in the activities at school. But now you are so crazy about computer games that you have no interest in your schoolwork and don't listen to the teachers as carefully as before in class.Also, you can't hand in your homework on time. Perhaps playing computer games can make you feel relaxed, but if you spend too much time on it, you will have less time to study. And it may do harm to your health. For example, it can hurt your eyes and neck.

I hope you should achieve a balance between your schoolwork and your hobbies. Why not join in some outdoor activities when you feel bored?As your friend, I'll be glad to share your happiness and sadness.

Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇材料作文，要求写一封信，向吉姆提出建议。本文已经给出了主要写作要点，动笔前要先认真阅读要点，然后围绕要点适当发挥。写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上；结合材料内容，可知本文主要是第一、第二人称，运用一般过去及现在时态进行叙述。语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯。适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】这篇短文涵盖了题目要求的所有要点内容，表达准确，意思连贯，符合逻辑。在文章的结构组织上很好地使用了简单句和复合句，文章脉络清晰，自然流畅。同时，文章还使用了一些常用的句式和短语，如used to sth过去常常做某事；takepart in参加；as…as…和…一样；hand in上交；on time按时；do harm to伤害；why not do sth为什么不做某事等。这为文章增色不少。在学习中注意积累，牢记一些常用句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理，让文章更出彩。

考点：材料作文。