Question

4．假如你是王明．你的朋友Nancy 最近写信给你，她在信中提到想找一份兼职工作，但又担心影响学习，所以想向你征求一些建议．请写封回信谈谈你的看法．要求：
（1）语法正确，意思连贯；
（2）80词左右．信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Nancy，
I'm glad to hear from you．                        Yours，
Wang Ming．

Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
I think a part-time job is good for you我认为兼职对你有益处．
think后是省略that的宾语从句．
【高分句型二】
However，there's something you need to pay attention to然而，有一些你需要注意的事情．
 you need to pay attention to是省略了关系词that的定语从句．that作为从句宾语，故可以省略．

解答 Dear Nancy，
I'm glad to hear from you．I think a part-time job is good for you．【高分句型一】（赞同）On the one hand，you can get more experience in your life．On the other hand，you can get some money，with which you can do something you like．However，there's something you need to pay attention to【高分句型二】．Don't get a busy and tiring job and don't make the job take you too much time．
After all，it is a part-time activity．Remember the most important thing you should do now is to focus on your study．I believe you can deal with it successfully!（建议和看法）
Yours，
Wang Ming．

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．