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书面表达（20%）【2013苏州】
初中生在成长的过程中总会碰到一些烦恼。就这一话题你班正积极筹备召开一次主题班会。请根据以下所列举的几项烦恼，用英语写一篇发言稿，并对这些烦恼逐一提出你的建议。
1．不被人理解，朋友少；
2．作业多，没有时间从事业余爱好；
3．父母给的零花钱不够用。
注意：1．文章开头和结尾已写好，不计入总词数；
2．词数90左右。
Dear classmates,
We middle school students do have many pains while we are growing up.
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That's all. Thank you!

Answer 1

Dear classmates,
We middle school students do have many pains while we are growing up. Some students think they are misunderstood by others and have few friends. I think if we can care more about others than ourselves, we can have more friends. Some students find too much homework makes them have no time for their hobbies. If so, I think they should plan their time in a wise way and make a list of what they need to do first. Others complain that their parents don’t give them enough pocket money. In my opnion, it is not a problem. We should learn to save money. Do you agree with me?
That's all. Thank you!

试题分析：考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示，注意文章文体、人称和时态。根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。温馨提醒：考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。
【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如. there are m We middle school students do have many pains while we are growing up ；I think if we can care more about others than ourselves, we can have more friends.还运用了if，while，that引导的从句；并注意了句子的衔接如：If so；In my opnion,等等。层次分明，表达流畅。
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