Question

4月20日，四川省雅安地区发生了一场大地震，那里的人们痛失亲人和家园。全国人民众志成城，抗震救灾。作为一名中学生，请你谈谈你的做法和感受。
要求：文章语言流畅，逻辑清晰，用词准确，80—100字左右。
词汇参考： 地震earthquake 悲痛   sorrow    亲人 relatives
受到感动be deeply moved    重建rebuild
募捐 raise money for
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Answer 1

　
On April 20th, a big earthquake happened in Ya’an, Sichuan. Many people lost their relatives and their homes. All the Chinese people feel quite sorrow.
　　A lot of people volunteered to help them. Some people raised money for them, some people bought something for them, some people went there to comfort the sad children. Thousands of soldiers helped them to save their relatives and rebuilt their homes Even foreign friends also gave them a hand.
I’m deeply moved by these people. So  I’ll use my pocket money to buy some food and school things for the children there. I think all of us should try our best to help them to get out of the trouble together.

试题分析：本文的写作首先对地震的情况进行相关的介绍，表明全国人民处于悲痛之中All the Chinese people feel quite sorrow.然后对人们的做法进行说明，如很多人志愿去帮助他们volunteered to help them.，为他们筹钱e raised money for them，重建家园rebuilt their homes，最后说明自己也被深深的打动，自己将用零花钱去给那里的小孩买食物use my pocket money to buy some food and school things for the children there.同时呼吁我们都尽努力去帮助那些人摆脱困境all of us should try our best to help them to get out of the trouble together.
点评：在对于诸如此类文章的写作，学生要注意变换句式，可以多使用高级词汇和多变换句式。学生在平时的练习、学习生活中要善于积累常用的表达。英语的写作过程中切忌使用重复的表达，对于不会表达的意思要学会替换，同时注意用平时在课本中或是阅读中积累的单词句型来自如的表达自己的意思，这样文章才能写出新意，写出文采。