Question

某中学在开展“崇尚节俭，文明做人(advocating thrift and being civilized)”活动一年来，取得了很好的效果，但还有极少数学生做得不够好，在校园里依然还会出现以下图片中的情形。请你选择以下现象中的几种或全部进行描述，并就中学生如何“杜绝浪费，文明做人”提出至少两点建议。
                    
leave the tap on    leave the lights on    throw the food away    draw on the wall  drop rubbish everywhere
要求：1. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。
2. 语言通顺，意思连贯，书写规范。
3. 词数80～100。文章的开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Some middle school students aren’t doing enough in “advocating thrift and being civilized”.
 
 
 
 

Answer 1

Some middle school students aren’t doing enough in “advocating thrift and being civilized.”
We’re sorry to see that there is still some waste in our school! For example, some often leave the taps on after washing their hands. In the dinning hall, a lot of food can be seen left after the meals. What’s worse, we often find that waste paper is thrown everywhere, which makes others feel uncomfortable. In addition, some students like to write or draw on the wall or on the desk.
As middle school students, we should develop good habits and stop wasting anything. Let’s do it from now on!

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们对学生们的一些浪费行为进行描述，并提出合理建议。题目中已经给了我们开头Some middle school students aren’t doing enough in “advocating thrift and being civilized.”，清楚地点明了在学生中间仍然存在着浪费的行为。因此接下来我们就可以接着这个话题，对学生们的浪费行为进行描述。我们可以从题目中给出的几幅图片中选择几种，详细地描写学生们做得不好的地方。然后我们要对这些现象提出建议，这就需要我们自己发挥想象力，把这一部分的内容补充完整。写作时，我们要仔细观察图片，将这些图片中的内容表达准确，使用正确的时态和人称。另外还需注意语句间的连接，以使短文表达流畅、连贯。
【亮点说明】这是一篇优秀的作文。在这篇短文中，作者对学生们中间还存在的浪费、不文明的现象进行了描述，并在文章的最后给出了自己的建议。符合题目要求，内容完整，结构清楚。作者对题目中给出的四幅图片进行了描述，如We’re sorry to see that there is still some waste in our school!、In the dinning hall, a lot of food can be seen left after the meals、What’s worse, we often find that waste paper is thrown everywhere、In addition, some students like to write or draw on the wall or on the desk。这部分中作者使用了比较多的句型和短语，如What’s worse、We’re sorry to see…、in addition等。最后作者给出了自己的建议，这里作者使用的短语是develop good habits,这个短语中的develop非常好；还有句型stop doing sth.，停止做某事。