Question

假设父亲节即将来临，请你借此机会给你父亲写封信，和他谈谈心里话。

要点： 1.父亲辛勤工作，让我受到更好的教育，过上好的生活。

2.父亲对我学习严格要求，但在我考试失利时，又经常鼓励我不要放弃。

3.表达对父亲的感谢和祝福。

要求：短文内容应包括所含提示要点，不要逐字逐句翻译，可适当发挥，语言流畅。

短文字数90字左右，短文中不得出现与考生本人相关的真实人名、校名、地址等。

Dear father,

Yours, Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear father,

Father’s Day is coming. I want to say thank you on this special day.

You are the man that I admire most in this world but I don’t know how to express my thanks most of the time.

I want to thank you for working so hard. Because of your great effort, our family lead a happy life and I receive better education. I understand that you are strict with me in my study because you want me to be better than before. I appreciate your kind encouragement when I failed in my exams.

I wish you could always be healthy and happy. I will try my best to be a man that you have always wished.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文，所给提纲要点清晰，要求明确，话题内容贴近学生生活实际。动笔前要认真审题，勾勒要点，并适当发挥。行文中要注意人称、时态的变化及主谓一致问题。同时注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

【亮点说明】这篇短文涵盖了题目要求的所有要点内容，表达准确，意思连贯，符合逻辑。在文章的结构组织上很好地使用了简单句和复合句，使文章自然流畅。同时，使用了一些的固定句式和短语，这为文章增色不少。学习中注意积累，牢记一些常用句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理。

考点：提纲作文。