Question

【题目】你的好朋友约翰是一名九年级的学生，目前他遇到了不少麻烦。请根据提示内容，用英语写一篇介绍好朋友约翰的短文。

Personality	有条理，注意细节，富有爱心
Hobby	痴迷于画画，擅长用色彩来表达自己的想法；最喜欢黄色，因为……
Problems	1. 父母对自己很严格, 太在乎考试分数 2.经常熬夜做作业，疑惑是否值得花费如此多的时间
Your advice	1. ...... 2. ......

注意：1. 短文须包括所有内容要点，要求语句通顺、意思连贯；

2. 要点须用展开合理想象，作适当发挥；

3. 词数在100个左右，短文首尾已在答题卡上给出，不计入总词数；

John, a Grade 9 student, is my best friend. He is

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I really hope my advice can be valuable to him.

Answer 1

【答案】John, a Grade 9 student, is my best friend. He is well-organized and pays attention to details. Besides, he has a heart full of love. John is crazy about drawing and he is good at expressing his own thoughts by using colors. His favourite color is yellow as it is the color of the sun and it represents success.

However, he has some problems at present. First, his parents are strict with him and they care too much about marks after each exam. Then, he often stays up so late to finish his homework that he even doubts whether it is worth spending so much time on it.

My suggestions are as follows. I think he’d better communicate more with his parents. It’s also a good idea for him to plan his time carefully so that he can finish his homework on time. In addition, maybe he should make a list of all the homework that he needs to do and work out how much time he needs.

I really hope my advice can be valuable to him.

【解析】

这篇作文的写作背景是一名九年级的好朋友约翰目前他遇到了不少麻烦，需要写一篇介绍好朋友约翰的短文，具体的信息已经通过表格的形式给了出来，包括约翰的性格、爱好、遇到的问题，这些部分的细节信息也给出了，但是关于建议这一块没有给出，需要自行补充，完成写作，总体来说写作的难度不大，要注意自己给出的建议要有条理，语言不要过于复杂，要清晰明了，让人一读就懂，不要长篇大论，一到两句话即可，在此基础上保证用词准确，语句连贯。

首先作文进行了性格的描述，相关短语应用准确，例如：well-organized 有条理的，pays attention to 关注…，a heart full of love 充满爱心， is crazy about 痴迷于…，is good at 擅长于…，expressing his own thoughts 表达他自己的思想，represents success 代表成功，在完成第一段的具体信息的描写后，第二段开始介绍他存在的一些困难，用到的表达有：are strict with him 对…严格，care too much about 过多关注…，stays up so late 熬夜很晚，finish his homework 完成家庭作业，spending so much time on 在…上花费了太多的时间。最后一段用来表述自己的建议，用到的表达有：My suggestions are as follows. 我的建议如下，communicate more with his parents 和他的父母更多地沟通，plan his time 规划他的时间，In addition 另外。最后一段表达了希望，希望自己的建议能对他有价值。总体来说写作内容完整，完成了写作任务。