Question

【题目】（二十三）

请根据以下提示，并结合具体事例，用英语写一篇短文。

Small things make a big difference. The small things we do can make us a responsible member of the society

注意：

1.无须写标题；

2.内容必须结合你生活中的具体事例；

3.文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；

4.词数不少于120，如引用提示语则不计入总词数。

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Answer 1

【答案】

It isn’t hard to grow up into a responsible member of society.

I can well remember an incident that happened on a rainy Sunday afternoon. I was on my way to the bookstore and was waiting for the green light at a crossing when a girl of about ten was knocked down by a passing car, which drove off quickly. A man immediately rushed to the girl to give her first aid and I joined in without hesitation. Luckily she was not badly injured and we sent her to the nearest hospital. Compared with the escaped driver, I am proud of what I did.

As a member of the society, I am aware that being responsible is what it takes to make a better society.

【解析】

试题分析：考官评卷首先会根据文章的内容和语言判定作文所属的档次，然后从：内容切题，语言表达准确、多样、连贯、得体，这几个方面评定分数。 结合具体事例的作文要注意，文中不能出现真实的姓名和场景，描述客观发生过的事情多用被动的方式表达。注意条理要清晰，逻辑顺序和结构要恰当。要注意题中所给的信息，不可偏题，可以多进行一些补充，尽量保持卷面整洁，字体美观，注意行文的连贯性。时态：一般过去式。结构上：可采取总分模式。使用一些高级句型和词汇提升作文档次。

【亮点说明】joined in、 knocked down、without hesitation、 drove off 、Compared with 、am proud of 等短语使文章更生动； It isn’t hard to grow up…….It做形式主语提前… an incident that happened on a rainy Sunday afternoon.中that引导的定语从句an incident 作为that的先行词，that后面的部分是对incident的描述。I was on my way … at a crossing when a girl of about ten was knocked down by a passing car, which drove off quickly. 其中有when引导的时间状语从句以及后面的which引导的非限制性定语从句。一个复合句中使用多个不同的小句，能显示出作者的文字功底。a girl of about ten was knocked down、 she was not badly injured 描述过去发生过的事情采用被动形式表示出客观描述的事实，显得文章自然真实。Compared with the escaped driver, I am proud of what I did.中Compared with是过去分词短语做状语提前，意思上相当于一个条件状语从句； I am proud of what I did.中有what引导的宾语从句。文章的安排分为三部分，开头部分：开门见山地引出文章主题。正文部分：描述具体事件。结尾部分：呼应主题，首尾相应。