Question

【题目】假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，请你给英国朋友写一封电子邮件，内容包括：

（1）你们原相约7月份一同爬长城；

（2）由于你自身某种原因（请说明具体原因），你无法按原计划前往；

（3）表达你的歉意并建议将旅行推迟到8月份。

注意：

1. 词数不少于50；

2. 开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Chris,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Chris,

How is everything going?

I remember we planned to visit the Great Wall together in July but now because my left leg was injured, I cannot go with you as planned. I hope the change will not cause you too much trouble.

I’m sorry about it. Can I suggest that we put it off until early August? I wish you could understand.

I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文中的道歉信的书写，要求考生写一封邮件，表达对原计划的改变：和朋友去爬长城，因为个人原因不能去，而表示歉意以及询问能否把计划推迟。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文：道歉信

时态：根据提示，时态以一般现在时为主，人称为第一人称

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1.阐述之前的计划

2.表达个人无法实现原计划的原因

3.表达歉意及推迟计划

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

plan to do, cause trouble, put off, hear from

第三步：连词成句

I remember we planned to visit the Great Wall together in July.

I hope the change will not cause you too much trouble.

Can I suggest that we put it off until early August?

I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon.

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表示原因：because, The reason why …is that….

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but,

4.表结果关系： So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改