Question

(2009年广东省湛江二中高三毕业班2月月考 ，IV读写任务)

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

The generation gap between students and their teachers is becoming more significant with only 3.3 percent out of a survey group of 1,000 students from 30 key middle schools in the city saying they would be willing to tell their teachers of their inner thoughts.

In today’s educational environment, teachers are positioned to be the authority figure for learning instead of becoming good friends in the life of students.

As only students with good marks in exams are considered the “apples in the eyes” of the teachers, most students think their teachers to be partial（偏心）.  

“I feel sad to hear such remarks,” said Yu Yi, a well-known special-class teacher.

She recalled that in the past, teachers and students would play basketball together or comment on novels while sitting on the grass during a break. But today, study and good marks are the only topics of conversation between students and teachers.

“Schools are not only the place where knowledge is imparted（传授）, but also where students are taught how to be an upright person,” Yu said. “The success of a person is not merely determined by intelligence but also by emotional state.”

Yang Xiong, director of the Juvenile Research Institute, said the educational system which focuses on examinations should be held to be substantially responsible.

写作内容

1.  以约30个词概括学生不愿告诉老师内心想法的原因；

2.  以约120个词就“现代师生关系”这个主题发表你的看法，包括如下要点：

（1）你是否愿意告诉老师你内心的想法，为什么？

（2）你希望你与你的老师之间的关系是怎样的？如何才能建立这种关系？

【写作要求】

1. 可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2. 标题自定；

3. 文中不能出现考生的真实姓名和学校名称。

【评分标准】   概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯

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Answer 1

Love and Concern Make an Ideal Relationship

Students are becoming unwilling to confess to their teachers because they are not equal in position and teachers lay too much emphasis on the academic performances of the students.

While some students might have doubts, I am willing to share my inner thoughts with my teachers. They show love and concern for their students and are good listeners. I always find it easy to seek support and advice from them, from which I benefit and learn a lot.

In this case, an ideal relationship between teachers and students is very important. In my opinion, this relationship should be one filled with love, care and understanding, in which teachers and students show respect for each other and exchange ideas freely. To build a relationship of this kind , teachers should become friends of students while students ought to place more trust in their teachers and give voice to their feelings frankly. Only by joint efforts can we enjoy a warm relationship between teachers and students.

解析:

本篇书面表达非常贴近学生实际的学习生活，让学生感觉到有话可说，而且乐于表达。

其写作要点注意以下几个方面：

1. 第一部分写作，可以通过阅读文中事例总结概括出原因来。但要注意词数限制和总结到位程度。

2．第二部分写作真正表达出自己所想所思的内容，注意四个关键要点：

A.“自己是否愿意”

B．“为什么”  

C．“希望什么样的关系”

D．“如何建立”

所以要在感觉非常愿意说的基础上准确把握要点范围，既要说还不能说的过多过广。