Question

16．根据新规，上海高中生必须在毕业前完成至少60小时的志愿者实践活动 （public service practice），这项政策引发了人们的热议．有人抱怨60小时太长，占用了学生的学习时间；也有人认为志愿者实践活动是有意义的，有助于培养学生社会责任感．对此，你的看法如何？请写一篇120-150 词左右的文章表达你的观点．
（注意：文章中不得出现本人真实的姓名与学校）

Answer 1

分析 高分句型
句型一：
So sometimes there are obstacles that stop students from putting their enthusiasm into practice①，and students can't choose the pubic service they like to do②．
因此，有时遇到阻止学生将他们的热情付诸实践的障碍，学生便不能选择他们喜欢做的公共服务了．
①为定语从句；先行词obstacles在后面的从句中作主语，故用关系代词that引导该从句．②为省略了关系代词的宾语从句，由于先行词the pubic service在从句中作宾语，故可以省略关系代词that/which．
句型二：
If students haven't reached the set time，teachers will criticize them and force them to do service practice at a set place，which made students unhappy and angry①．
如果学生们没有达到规定的时间，老师就会批评他们，并强迫他们到一个指定的地方去做服务实践活动，这会使得学生们感到不高兴和愤怒．
本句为条件状语从句，其主句①为非限定性的定语从句，用来补充说明新规的实施会带来的后果．

解答 Recently，there is a hot topic that Shanghai high school students must accomplish at least 60 class hours of public service practice which is a prerequisite for graduation．This policy has triggered a wide discussion and various reactions．Different people have different opinions．Personally speaking，this policy isn't good to students．（针对新规，提出了自己的看法；即提出论点．）
First of all，students may be refused in a pubic service project．One of my classmates said that a group of students once appied for volunteer positions in a library and were refused．The library gave them the volunteer certificates directly and dismissed them．So sometimes there are obstacles that stop students from putting their enthusiasm into practice，and students can't choose the pubic service they like to do．【高分句型一】It seems that under some circumstances，high school students pubic service becomes a mere formality．（举实例论证了学生们并不被一些公共服务部门所接受，高中生的公共服务也只是流于形式．）
Besides，the motive of the policy is to make students more engaged in social practice，but the goal is hard to achieve as long as the whole education system remains unchanged．Students have a lot of homework to do，and at weekends，most students will go to tutorial centers to have supplementary place．I think the time set of 60 hours is too long．It will even take up some of students'study time，so it is time-consuming．（结合现在的教育体制以及学生们学习非常紧张的现状，论证了该项新规并不能达到其预期的目标．）
Last but no the least，the policy results in the comparison between schools．Some schools compare their students'total hours of pubic service practice with other school．If students haven't reached the set time，teachers will criticize them and force them to do service practice at a set place，which made students unhappy and angry．【高分句型二】．（从新规的实施可能会引发的后果论证了它会使得学生们的社会实践活动失去本来的意义．）
In conclusion，public service is a meaningful thing only if students do it voluntarily instead of being forced． So students should finish their study first，and then do the public service practice in their spare time．（得出结论：只有当学生自愿而不是在被强迫的情况下，公共服务才是一件有意义的事情．因此，学生应该首先完成学业，然后利用业余时间再去从事社会实践活动．）

点评 首先应注意议论文写作的三个要素：1、提出论点；2、组织论据，进行论证；3、得出结论； 其次，除了学会套用一些常用的句型和短语外，还需要根据题目的具体内容和要求，灵活地选用句式；另外，根据句子语气的需要，可在英语句中适当地增加一些情态动词"should/can/may/had better/must"，以及句与句之间合理使用一些并列、递进、转折等关系的关联词语，这样，议论文的结构会更加严谨，更具说服力和感染力．