Question

【题目】假设你是李华。在刚结束的中学生英语演讲比赛中获得了第一名。准备比赛期间， 你得到了外教James的指导和帮助。请你根据以下要点提示给外教James写一封邮件。内容 包括：

1. 获奖的消息

2. 外教的帮助

3. 感恩的心情

注意：

1. 词数 80 左右；

2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear James,

I’m eagerly writing to inform you of my success in the English speech contest.

It’s indeed a pleasant surprise for me to rank first among so many excellent contestants. But without your patient guidance, I couldn’t have made so great an achievement. You helped me polish the draft and improve my pronunciation. You trained me in simulated question and answer sessions (问答环节), which turned out really helpful in the real competition. No words are strong enough to express my heartfelt gratitude to you.

Thank you very much and wish you all the best.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达考查书信的写作。要求考生给外教James写信，告诉他自英语演讲比赛中获一等奖的消息，并向他表示感谢。

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应以一般现在时和一般过去时为主

结构：总分总

内容要求：

1. 获奖的消息

2. 外教的帮助

3. 感恩的心情

第二步：列提纲（重点词组）

be eager to do sth./ inform sb. of sth./ win the first prize/ thank sb. for sth./ offer sb. sth./ appreciate sb. doing sth./ help sb. do sth./ encourage sb. to do sth.

第三步：连词成句

I’m eagerly writing to tell you my success in the English speech contest.

It’s indeed a pleasant surprise for me to win the first prize in the contest.

But for your patient guidance, I couldn’t have made such a great achievement.

You helped me polish the draft and improve my pronunciation.

You trained me in simulated question and answer sessions, which turned out really helpful in the real competition.

No words are strong enough to express my heartfelt gratitude to you.

Thank you very much and wish you all the best.

第四步：连句成篇（加入衔接词或从句）

表示并列的连词：and/but/or/so…

状语从句连词：because/ if/ though/ although…

定语从句连词：which/ that/ when/ where…

第五步：修改润色（加入高级词汇或短语）

【高分句型1】

It was you that helped me to perfect the draft and correct my pronunciation.是你帮助我完善草稿，和纠正发音。句中使用了强调句it was…that…

【高分句型2】

What I am eager to inform you is that I win the first prize in the English speech contest.我迫切想告诉你的是我在英语演讲比赛中获得了一等奖。本句使用了what引导主语从句，和that引导表语从句。