Question

【题目】假定你是学校英语社团负责人李华，计划组织英文视频配音比赛。请给你的外教 Mr. Albert写一封邮件,请他帮忙审定策划书，并就比赛的形式、内容等方面提供建议。

注意: 1. 词数100左右;

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

参考词汇：配音dubbing

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr. Albert,

I'm Li Hua from the English Club of our school. We're now planning to hold an English dubbing competition. I'm writing to ask you for some advice.

We've already written a plan for the competition, but given that this is the first time that we've held such an activity, I'm not quite sure whether the plan is suitable. So I hope you could spare some time to tell me your opinion on the plan. It would be great if you could also give us some advice on the form of the competition, the content of the material and so on.

Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生写一封邮件，请求外教帮忙审定英文视频配音比赛的策划书，并就比赛的形式、内容等方面提供建议。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和现在进行时为主，兼用其它时态。

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1.表明写邮件的原因

2.寻求帮助

1）请求帮忙审定策划书；

2）询问关于比赛的形式的建议；

3) 询问关于比赛的内容的建议。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

English Club; plan to do sth; hold an English dubbing competition; ask sb for some advice; a plan for; spare some time to do; on the form of ; the content of; look forward to.

第三步：连词成句

1. I'm Li Hua from the English Club of our school.

2. We're now planning to hold an English dubbing competition.

3. I'm writing to ask you for some advice.

4. We've already written a plan for the competition, but given that this is the first time that we've held such an activity.

5. I'm not quite sure whether the plan is suitable.

6. I hope you could spare some time to tell me your opinion on the plan.

7. It would be great if you could also give us some advice on the form of the competition, the content of the material and so on.

8. Looking forward to your reply.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改