Question

【题目】假定你是李华。上周你在某国外网站购买了一支录音笔(recording pen),收货后你发现它有很多质量问题。请根据下列提示给客服经理Miss Green发一封电子邮件。

内容包括:

1.来信目的;

2.产品(录音笔)问题;

3.你期待的解决办法。

注意:

1.词数100左右;

2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;

3.开头和结束语已为你写好,不计人总词数。

Dear Miss Green,

_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

I' m looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes !

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Miss Green,

I’m writing to tell you something about the recording pen I bought from your website last week. There seems to be something wrong with it. First, the voice isn’t so clear as you claimed. Second, it’s not easy to operate, which caused me much trouble. Third, it often breaks down. In my opinion a recording pen at such a high price shouldn’t have so many problems.

I’m not satisfied with all these above. I would appreciate it very much if I could get my money back and I’ll send it back to you as soon as you return the money. If it can’t be helped, I wish you could have it repaired or changed.

I’m looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给客服经理Miss Green发一封电子邮件反馈录音笔的质量问题

第一步: 审题

体裁: 应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。

结构: 总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：

1.来信目的;

2.产品(录音笔)问题;

3.你期待的解决办法。

第二步: 列提纲 (重点词组)

be easy to；break down；in my opinion；satisfied with

第三步: 连词成句

1. I’m writing to tell you something about the recording pen I bought from your website last week.

2. First, the voice isn’t so clear as you claimed. Second, it’s not easy to operate, which caused me much trouble.

3. Third, it often breaks down. In my opinion a recording pen at such a high price shouldn’t have so many problems.

4. I’m not satisfied with ail these above. I would appreciate it very much if I could get my money back and I’ll send it back to you as soon as you return the money.

5. If it can’t be helped, I wish you could have it repaired or changed.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步: 连句成篇 (衔接词)

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second，And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand,On the other hand,while,as for

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步: 润色修改