Question

目前环境保护已成为人们极为关心的问题。 假设你受邀参加一次国际中学生环境保护论坛征稿活动，请按根据以下提示，用英语写一篇应征短文： 1.简述目前环境状况； 2.环境污染产生的原因及对生活的影响； 3.提出两个解决办法。
注意：1.词数 120 左右；
可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3.文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称。
The environment has become a matter of great concern to the general public.
 
 

Answer 1

One possible version：
The world we live in is becoming more and more intolerable because of environmental destruction. Haze weather is a typical example that is affecting our life. Besides, forest destruction results in decrease of planting land. Now around China, most of the cities are enveloped by heavy haze which is the killer of our respiration.
Serious as the problem seems, we can come up with some measures to deal with it. First of all, the authorities should adopt the policy of "sustainable development", and the environmental protection should be strictly put into effect.
What’s more, every citizen should realize the seriousness of the problem and make concerted efforts to protect our environment. In addition, planting trees helps improve and beautify the environment.

解析试题分析：根据提示可知本文属于话题作文。仔细读题可知这篇文章的主题为“环境保护”，并且出题者对文章内容也有要求。所以在写这篇文章的时候难度不是很大，只需要分别完成三个关于写作内容的要求，文章的框架就出来了。然后再适当添加语句，是文章充实起来，并且上下文衔接自然。在描述目前环境现状的时候用一到两句话就足够了。在描述其产生的原因和影响时注意句子之间的过渡及连接词如 Besides等的使用。文章的重心在于就环境保护提出两个解决办法，在这一部分尤其要注意句子之间的衔接和层次。最后在选词造句过程中注意长短句结合以及高级词汇的使用。
【亮点说明】
本片范文层次分明，结合出题者的要求并很好地掌握了重心。第一段开篇就用一句话The world we live in is becoming more and more intolerable because of environmental destruction.简要描述目前的环境现状。然后举出时下的环境热点如雾霾Haze weather 和森林植被问题forest destruction 等，巧妙的是第一段最后Now around China, most of the cities are enveloped by heavy haze which is the killer of our respiration. 以环境问题联系实际生活，很好地总结了第一段的内容。第二段和第三段集中就前文提到的环境问题给出一些解决方法。在这两段中，过渡词的使用如 First of all，What’s more和In addition等，使得文章上下衔接自然，阅卷老师一目了然。其次，定语从句如most of the cities are enveloped by heavy haze which is the killer of our respiration. 倒装句Serious as the problem seems等句型的使用也为文章增色不少。