Question

5．一家英语报社向中学生征文，主题是"My dream school"，请根据下列要点及畅想写一篇作文．
1 学校上学，放学时间及开设的课程．
2 学生的校内外活动．
3 学校的环境及师生关系．
注意：①词数120左右  ②可根据内容要点适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息"My dream school"为主题，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确三个要点：学校上学，放学时间及开设的课程，学生的校内外活动，学校的环境及师生关系．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达．after-school activities课外活动；play sports 做运动；kind and helpful和蔼乐于助人
They are not only our teachers but also our friends．（高分句型）

解答 My Dream School
My dream school starts at 8：30 a．m．and ends at 3：30 p．m．（高分句型）There are three lessons in the morning and two in the afternoon．We don't need to do so much homework．Therefore，we have more time for after-school activities．For example，we can do reading for one and a half hours and play sports for one hour every day．
My dream school looks like a big garden．There are all kinds of flowers and trees around the classroom buildings．We can lie on the grass for a rest，or sit by the lake listening to music．The teachers here are kind and helpful．They are not only our teachers but also our friends．（高分句型）
How I wish I could receive education at such a school!

点评 提纲类写作的文章较开放式的文体，比较好写．学生在写作的过程中，首先思路要清晰，要对所表达的句子通顺的说出来，遇到不会的要学会替换所用语，来达到同样的意思．在每一篇作文中，对于表达观点的句子，都要用上起承转合的连词来加强文章的层次感，适当运用俗语，运用平时常用的句式来使文章富有变化，表达地道得体．