Question

【题目】假设你是李华，你收到英国笔友Tom发来的一封邮件，得知他最近转入了一所新学校，在新学校里他没有朋友感到很孤单。请你给他回复邮件，内容包括：

1. 帮他分析原因；2. 给他提出建议（至少两条）；3. 美好祝愿。

注意：1. 词数不少于 80；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Tom,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tom,

I am sorry to hear that you feel lonely in your new school. As a new student, it is natural for you to find it difficult to get along well with the other students in class and don’t know how to adapt to new environment in the beginning.

Here are some suggestions that I hope can help you. First, don’t worry. Although you are not familiar with the other students there, time and patience will make you feel at home. Second, perhaps you are just not used to the lifestyle there at this moment, so you should try to adapt yourself to the new environment. Third, go out and get actively involved in some after-school activities, where you can find some students who share your interests. I believe you will make good friends soon. Last, communicate with your classmates actively, and let them know more about you.

May you make new friends soon./Wish to hear your good news soon.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写一封邮件给英国笔友Tom，帮他分析没有朋友感到孤单的原因并提出相关的建议。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1. 帮他分析原因；

2. 给他提出建议（至少两条）；

3. 美好祝愿。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

get along well with；adapt to；in the beginning；be familiar with；feel at home；be used to；get involved in；after-school activities；communicate with

第三步：连词成句

1. it is natural for you to find it difficult to get along well with the other students in class and don’t know how to adapt to new environment in the beginning.

2. Although you are not familiar with the other students there, time and patience will make you feel at home.

3. perhaps you are just not used to the lifestyle there at this moment,

4. go out and get actively involved in some after-school activities,

5. communicate with your classmates actively, and let them know more about you.

(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,

6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表选择：either…or…，or

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改