Question

【题目】假设你是新华中学的学生张凯，班里从外地转来一名学生李华，他一时无法融入新的班集体中，感到很苦恼。请根据下列要点用英语给他写一封建议信。

1.帮他分析原因；

2.给他提出建议；

3.陈述你帮助他的具体打算。

注意：词数100左右。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Li Hua，

I know you are now having trouble communicating with others.That's because you are new here and people don't know about you.But I think you can fit in with the new class if you follow the following suggestions.

Firstly, you should take an active part in class discussions.At the same time, learn to listen to other people's views.Secondly, it is necessary to learn about your classmates' likes and dislikes.Only in this way can you get to know more different people.Last but not least, I'm always here ready to help you.We can take part in some activities together where I can introduce you to others.

I hope my suggestions will be helpful to you.

Yours，

Zhang Kai

【解析】

这是一篇说明文，要求写一封信。

第一步：审题。审题的目的是获取重要信息。通过审题我们可以确定几个方面的信息。第一、时态为一般现在时。第二、人称为第二人称。

第二步：布局段落，确定主要段落，次要段落，段落数量。这篇写作段落数量为三段。第一段，1.帮他分析原因；2.给他提出建议。第二段，陈述你帮助他的具体打算。第三段，表达祝愿。其中第二段为主要段落。

第三步：确定关键词汇和短语。communicate with, fit in with, take an active part in, view, likes and dislikes, activities, introduce.

第四步：确定较为高级的句子。I know you are now having trouble communicating with others. That's because you are new . It is necessary to learn about your classmates' likes and dislikes. Only in this way can you get to know more different people. We can take part in some activities together where I can introduce you to others .

第五步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连接词进行过渡衔接。But,Firstly,At the same time,Secondly,Last but not least.

第六步：注意书写，保持卷面整洁，避免划线，乱擦。

【亮点说明】

文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式如:I know you are now having trouble communicating with others. That's because you are new . It is necessary to learn about your classmates' likes and dislikes. Only in this way can you get to know more different people. We can take part in some activities together where I can introduce you to others 高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次。整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。