Question

【题目】假定你是李华，从互联网上得知Banks夫妇的西餐馆在登广告招聘兼职服务员。请写一封电子邮件应聘。

内容包括:

1.发邮件的目的。

2.自我介绍。

3.应聘理由(可开阔视野、交到新朋友等)。

4.表达自己的希望。

注意:1.词数100左右。

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Mr. & Mrs. Banks,

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Regards

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr. & Mrs. Banks,

I'm Li Hua, who has just graduated from high school this summer. I know that you want some part-timers for your newly opened Western restaurant on the Internet and I'd like to be part of your team.

I've been learning English for 10 years, and I can express myself fluently. Besides, I'm diligent and healthy with a nice character, which helps me get along well with people of different backgrounds. What matters most is the opportunity to expand my horizons as well as make more new friends. And it is the sense of commitment that I am eager to raise through such a valuable experience that inspires me to make this request.

An early reply at your convenience will be much appreciated if my qualifications meet with your approval.

Regards

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写一封电子邮件给为自己西餐馆登广告招聘兼职服务员的Banks夫妇，应聘服务员这一职位。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1. 发邮件的目的；

2. 自我介绍；

3. .应聘理由(可开阔视野、交到新朋友等)；

4.表达自己的希望。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

graduate from；get along well with sb.；expand one’s horizons；be eager to do sth.；inspire sb. to do sth.

第三步：连词成句

1. I'm Li Hua, who has just graduated from high school this summer.

2. which helps me get along well with people of different backgrounds.

3. What matters most is the opportunity to expand my horizons as well as make more new friends.

4. And it is the sense of commitment that I am eager to raise through such a valuable experience that inspires me to make this request.

(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,

6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表选择：either…or…，or

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改