Question

假如你是李华，你代表你们班同学给你们学校新来的外籍教师Mr. Smith写一封电子邮件，告诉他大家对他第一周教学的感受，内容包括：

1、大家对他的总体评价较高；

2、具有独特的、使课堂生动活泼的方法；

3、知识渊博，且对学生很耐心；

4、就如何帮助英语基础薄弱的学生，向他提一些建议（内容自拟）。

注意：1.电子邮件必须包括以上内容，可适当增加细节；

2. 词数110左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）。

Dear Mr. Smith，

On behalf of the students of our class, I email you telling you how we feel about your first-week teaching in our class.

Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Smith,

On behalf of the students of our class, I e-mail you telling you how we feel about your first-week teaching in our class. All of us students think highly of your way of teaching, as you can always make your class lively and interesting. In addition, you are such a learned man that we can learn a lot from you and most important of all, you are patient with us. Frankly, you have built up our confidence in learning English well.

Some of us are still poor at English and need your help. We hope you will speak a little bit slowly so that we can understand you better. Besides, would you please spend more time with us, joining in our after school activities so that we have more chances to practice our oral English?

If you have any difficulties in your life here, just tell us. We are ready to offer you any help.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇提纲类作文，给外教反应一周以来的感受，使用第一人称为主，时态为一般现在时。要点文章都已经给了出来，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来.本作文中给出的要点比较具体,故需要准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。

【亮点说明】高级词汇的运用是本文最大的亮点：介词短语On behalf of 代表…；think highly of高度评价….；In addition而且；Frankly坦率地说；built up our confidence建立自信等等；在写作的时候，我们要选择合适的和文章内容相一致的高级词汇让我们的文章更有层次感。

考点：考察提纲来短文写作