Question

【题目】假定你是李华，今年十月份即将去英国的布莱顿大学（Brighton University）留学。请给你在布莱顿的网友Tora写一封英文电子邮件，让他介绍一下布莱顿这座城市，告知他你的租房需求并请他帮忙租房子。

注意:1.词数100左右；

2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Tom，

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dera Tom

I’m writing to tell you that we’ll meet each other soon because I’ll start my study in Brighton University this October.

To make my stay ther more comfortable,I wonder if you could do me a favor.First, I need to have a clear idea of the city of Brighton in advance,so would you please give me a brief introduction to it?Second,I want to live off campus while studying there.Therefore,could you please help me rent a one-bedroom apartment with a kitchen and a bathroom?

Looking forward to your early reply!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇提纲类作文，文章要点已经给出，在写这篇文章时要注意以下几点：

1.整篇文章时态以一般现在时为主。

2.要点要齐全，但是不要进行简单的罗列，可以采用适当的连接词，或者是表递进关系的副词如What’s worse、In view of the above、First of all、Besides，使上下文衔接自然，行文自然流畅。

3 .要列举一下例子，最好用简单句与复合句结合的方法写作如we should eat more fruit, from which we can get enough vitamins to build up the resistance to disease。

4.多采用一些高级句型，如we’d better wear masks when we go outside，It’s one of the most dangerous weather conditions，同时使用一些词组如due to ， result from，get enough，build up等。

【范文亮点】

提纲性文章难点：扩充成句，因为提纲性文章主题内容已经基本列出，在将短句扩充时，要精炼。其中要注意尽量用高级词汇和复杂句是来表达，如强调句，定语从句等，就如文中I’m writing to tell you that we’ll meet each other soon。再者就是要多使用一些高级词汇与词组，如文中looking forward to，have a clear idea of，live off 以及help ...with...等。最后就是要段落清新，层次分明。就像文中要多使用一些连接词语如First、Second以及Therefore等，使衔接自然。