Question

假设你是李华。请根据写作要点用英语写一篇周记，记述你周末或在假期中帮助家人做家务的一次经历。

写作要点：

1.做家务的理由；

2.做家务的过程；

3.你的感受。

注意：

词数不少于100字；

开头已给不计入总词数；

不可写真实姓名。注意时态。

I am an 18-year-old middle school student. _________________________

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Answer 1

I’m an 18-year-old middle school student. I have been busy with my study and seldom helped my parents with the housework. Feeling quite sorry for that, I begin to think about what to do to help.

Last Sunday, when my parents went out shopping, I suddenly got an idea: why not give the rooms a thorough cleaning? Firstly, I collected all the books, newspapers and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place. Then I wiped the dust off all the furniture. After that, I swept and mopped the floors.

At this very moment, my parents came back and were quite surprised to see all the rooms tidy and floors shining. My mother gave me a hug and I could see satisfaction in her eyes. Tired as I was, I never felt so happy.

【解析】

试题分析：题目要求根据所给要点写一篇周记，记述帮家人做家务的一次经历。写作要求包括：做家务的理由；做家务的过程；自己的感受三个方面。词数在100词左右，注意开头和结尾不计入总词数；不能出现真实姓名，注意时态的正确使用；不要出现标点和拼写错误，尽量保持卷面整洁、字体美观；注意行文的连贯性。

亮点说明：

范文使用了一些重要的语法知识：非谓语动词Feeling quite sorry for that，scattered in the rooms；宾语从句what to do to help；时间状语从句when my parents went out shopping；让步状语从句Tired as I was等，语法知识使用得当，叙事清晰；

范文注意使用了现在完成时、一般现在时、一般过去时等不同的时态来叙述不同的事情，对时态有较好的把握；

范文注意使用频度副词seldom, never等来表示强调，使表达更加生动；

范文使用了很多固定短语：help...with，begin to，think about，put ... in place等，使作文内容更加充实；

范文注意使用Last Sunday, Firstly, Then, After that, At this very moment等来衔接句子和段落，表示事情发生的时间顺序，使作文更有条理，做到了行文连贯。

考点：材料类作文