Question

【题目】根据写作要求，短文内容，写出一篇连贯完整的短文。词数不少于60。

Four teams of mountaineers set out on a race to conquer (征服) an unclimbed mountain peak in the Himalayas. The Canadian team chose a long, but safe route, while the British, Chinese and Russian teams chose a faster but steep and dangerous route up the mountain.

When night fell, the teams made camp on the mountainside. But the next morning, the sun rapidly rose air temperature and the strong wind caused a heavy snowfall, which led to a terrible avalanche. The disaster struck and some members of the British, Chinese and Russian teams were swept away and killed. But the Canadians didn’t know what had happened.

It was an hour after the disaster and there was no hope of finding any survivors. The leaders of the British, Chinese and Russian teams, met to discuss how to successfully keep all the survivors alive.

	Britain	Russia	China
Members	3	2	2
Tents	1 two-man	None	1 four-man
Sleeping bags	3	2	2
Rope	25 metres	50 metres	None
Food	1 person for 3 days	2 people for 4 days	2 people for 2 days
Medicine	None	None	None

The table above was a summary of what they could collect. The leaders made a final decision that they had to find a way to conquer the mountain and put their flags on the peak.

假设你是领队之一，请你联系加拿大领队David，告知你们的遭遇和决定，并向对方求助。内容包括：1. 你们的遭遇及目前的困难；2. 你们的决定及理由；3. 向对方求助。

Dear David,

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Yours,

Steve

Answer 1

【答案】Dear David,

I’m the leader of Chinese team. My team, together with British and Russian teams, came across a terrible avalanche so that we lost some of our teammates. We really need your help. At present, there’re 7 people, 3 tents, 7 sleeping bags, 75 meters of rope, some food and no medicine in our three teams, which makes it hard for us to conquer the mountain. Although we have encountered great difficulties, we will not give up and we decide to continue the competition. It is not only because we believe that nothing is impossible in the world, but also because we still have the ability to finish the game. However, we need your team’s help. We will choose your route and hope you can walk so slowly that we can catch up with you on the mountainside. Let’s put our flags on the peak together and wish you good luck. Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Steve

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生联系加拿大领队David，向其求助，告知David你们的遭遇和面临的困境，你们决定继续攀登，但需要他们的帮助。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1. 你们的遭遇及目前的困难；

2. 你们的决定及理由；

3. 向对方求助。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

come across；give up；decide to do sth.；have the ability to do sth.；catch up with sb.

第三步：连词成句

1. My team, together with British and Russian teams, came across a terrible avalanche so that we lost some of our teammates.

2. we will not give up and we decide to continue the competition.

3. but also because we still have the ability to finish the game.

4. We will choose your route and hope you can walk so slowly that we can catch up with you on the mountainside.

(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,

6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表选择：either…or…，or

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改