Question

【题目】假设你是李华，你的叔叔最近因为吸烟而得了肺病。请你根据以下要点提示给他写一封信劝他戒烟。

1. 想吸烟的时候，可以试着喝些水或吃些健康的小吃；

2. 远离平时经常一起吸烟的朋友。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Uncle，

I am sorry to know that...

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Yours，

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Uncle，

I'm sorry to know that you are ill. We all know smoking does great harm to our health, and I think you'd better give up smoking as soon as possible. Firstly, whenever you want to smoke, try drinking some water or eating some healthy snacks. Secondly, maybe you have some friends who often smoke with you. Stay away from them.

My father used to smoke heavily and once had a serious lung disease, but now he has given up smoking and is living a healthy life. So give up smoking right now. I hope you will do it!

Yours，

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生写一封信劝得了肺病的叔叔戒烟。

第一步: 审题

体裁: 应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。

结构: 总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要点：

1.想吸烟的时候，可以试着喝些水或吃些健康的小吃。

2. 远离平时经常一起吸烟的朋友。

第二步: 列提纲 (重点词组)

do great harm to；give up；as soon as possible；look forward to

第三步: 连词成句

I'm sorry to know that you are ill.

We all know smoking does great harm to our health, and I think you'd better give up smoking as soon as possible.

Firstly, whenever you want to smoke, try drinking some water or eating some healthy snacks.

Secondly, maybe you have some friends who often smoke with you.

My father used to smoke heavily and once had a serious lung disease, but now he has given up smoking and is living a healthy life.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步: 连句成篇 (衔接词)

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second，And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause(从句), In spite of + n/ doing,On the one hand, On the other hand, while, as for

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步: 润色修改