Question

【题目】下面的饼状图显示了某校对学生学业成绩评价的新体制，图表所示的五个方面构成了一个学生的学业成绩。假如你是该校学生，请你以“The New Grading System in Our School”为题用英语写一篇短文，给《二十一世纪英文报》投稿。

【内容要点】

简要描述图中信息；

谈谈你对这一新举措的看法并说明原因。

【写作要求】

不要逐条翻译；

作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；

词数150左右。

【评分标准】

内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。

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Yours

Li Jin

Answer 1

【答案】The New Grading System in Our School

In order to help students develop their abilities in all fields, our school now has asked the teachers to make some changes in the grading system. This chart shows how it works.

Students’ test results, which used to be the only way to evaluate a student in school, make up only 30% of his final score. Instead, how a student performs in class, and how he takes notes and does his homework are also taken into account, each part of which makes up 20%. Besides, teamwork in class is also important. If you want a higher score, you should be good at working together with your classmates.

I’m all for the new grading system, which evaluates us students in all fields. By doing so, we students can fully develop our abilities as well as potential on our way to adulthood and can truly make preparations for our future life.

【解析】本文是图表类作文。提纲类作文是在题干中把作文要讨论的问题或者现象直接用文字表述出来。而图表作文是把问题或者现象用图表反映出来，要求我们把图表看懂，并用文字叙述出来，才能对这个问题或现象展开讨论。饼状图表多数用来表示各种事物在总数百分之一百中所占的各自比例。

【范文亮点】

首先，本文结构合理，语篇连贯，内容完整。本文借助于题目The New Grading System in Our School，可以看出图表呈现的是新的评分系统各项评分标准的权重。

本文的重点段落客观地解释了图表传递的信息，通过数据之间的对比分析Students’ test results…make up only 30% of his final score. … ，… how a student performs in class, and how he takes notes and does his homework are also taken into account, each part of which makes up 20%，得出结论：If you want a higher score, you should be good at working together with your classmates。

最后一段表明自己的看法I’m all for the new grading system，并说明原因By doing so, we students can fully develop our abilities…and can truly make preparations for our future life。

其次，本文语言运用熟练，用词准确，尤其是定语从句、主语从句、条件状语从句等复合句的穿插使用，使得文章长短错落有层次，增强了可读性。