Question

【题目】上周你参加了学校组织的演讲比赛，并获一等奖。由于你的英语老师Mr.Wang对你这次参赛提供了许多帮助，现在你想写一封电子邮件对他表示感谢并与他分享比赛过程及获奖感受。

内容包括：1.介绍参赛情况；

2.告知获奖情况；

3.表达对老师的感谢。

Dear Mr. Wang,

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Yours truly,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】I am writing to express my heartfelt gratitude to you for offering timely help and professional guidance during my preparation for the speech contest.

As the only competitor from our class, I had to compete against other 14 excellent participants in front of the whole school, which put me under great pressure the instant I stepped on the stage.// However, at the thought of your suggestions and instructions. I calmed myself down instantly and then everything went so smoothly that the judges and audience gave me a big round of applause at end of the competition.// The second I knew I was the winner of the first prize, I couldn’t wait to share with you the exciting news because without your timely help and professional guidance. I couldn’t have made it.

Please accept my gratitude, now and always. I will move on to make further progress to live up to you expectation in the future. May you have a healthy body and lead a happy life!

【解析】本文属于感谢信。感谢信的写作格式一般分为三段。

本文属于感谢信。感谢信的写作格式一般分为三段。

第一段表达感谢之情并说明原因（告知获奖情况；）。第二段细述介绍参赛情况。第三段再次阐述谢意并表达回报愿望。

分析：本文格式正确，内容完整，行文连贯。运用了三个复杂句，让文章的语法更为严谨复杂。运用了多种句式，如状语从句，宾语从句等。同时还运用了许多高级词汇，为文章增添了亮点

本文的第二段使用了三个复杂句：(1)As the only competitor from our class, I had to compete against other 14 excellent participants in front of the whole school, which offering timely help and professional guidance the instant I stepped on the stage。(2)I calmed myself down instantly and then everything went so smoothly that the judges and audience gave me a big round of applause at end of the competition。(3)The second I knew I was the winner of the first prize, I couldn’t wait to share with you the exciting news because without your timely help and professional guidance。这三个复杂句让文章的内容紧凑而成为一个有机整体。

在复杂句中包含了由which引导的非限制性定语从句，由as引导的原因状语从句，由so…that…引导的结果状语从句，及以the second引导的时间状语从句，以及由because引导的原因状语从句。最后一段用一个祁使句（May you have a healthy body and lead a happy life!）完美地结束本文。

本文同时使用了大量的的高级词汇：express my heartfelt gratitude，offer timely help and professional guidance，at the thought of your suggestions and instructions.，everything go so smoothly, give me a big round of applause, without your timely help and professional guidance. I couldn’t have made it, make further progress to live up to you expectation.给文章增添了色彩和亮点。