Question

【题目】假设你是李华，你的加拿大笔友Daniel来信向你求助。他最近和妈妈闹矛盾，因为妈妈不让他过多上网。他对此很不理解。请你给他写一封回信，要点如下：

(1)建议他向妈妈道歉；(2)说明过多上网的危害；(3)列举一些健康的休闲方式。

注意：(1)词数80左右；

(2)可适当加入细节，以使行文连贯；

(3)开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Daniel,

I’m very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Daniel,

I’m very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction.

In my opinion, you should apologize to your mother, as she has done nothing wrong to prevent you from Internet addiction. Although the Internet plays an important role in modern life, we can’t ignore its harm to us. Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others, which may not only result in poor health and decline in study but also loss of communication in the real world.

As students, we should devote our energy to study. When available, you may as well walk outside with your friends or take some exercise to keep fit instead of playing online games. Only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】第一步：审题，确定时态。这是一篇信件类作文，信件需要包含的内容已经给出。(1)建议他向妈妈道歉；(2)说明过多上网的危害；(3)列举一些健康的休闲方式。需要使用一般现在时。第二步：抓中心，列要点，列出写作提纲，信的开头首先说明问题，I’m very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction.. 接下来逐条提出自己的建议。第三步：选词组句；第四步：连句成篇；第五步：复查纠错，通读全文，检查内容是否符合要求，要点是否齐全，格式是否正确，词数是否合乎要求。最主要的是要检查句子是否符合英语习惯，句型是否正确，语法是否正确（包括句子结构、时态、语态、主谓一致等），检查单词是否误写、少写，习语搭配是否得当等，以及字母大小写、标点符号是否正确等，这就要求考生在定稿认真检查，仔细核对，及时发现并改正问题，保证要点齐全，句子完整通顺，力争减少失误。

亮点说明：如果在写文章时可以准确运用从句，将会为自己提分不少。I’m very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction. 这里含有宾语从句；这里含有非限制性定语从句。