Question

阅读下面短文，然后按要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Once upon a time in a land far away, there was a wonderful old man who loved everything：animals, spiders, insects...

One day while walking through the woods the nice old man found a cocoon（茧）of a butterfly. He took it home. A few days later, a small opening appeared; he sat and watched the butterfly for several hours as it struggled to force its body through that little hole. Then it seemed to stop making any progress. It appeared as if it had gotten as far as it could and it could go no farther.

Then the man decided to help the butterfly, so he took a pair of scissors and cut off the remaining bit of the cocoon.

The butterfly then came out with ease.

But it had a swollen body and small, shriveled（萎缩的）wings. The man continued to watch the butterfly because he expected that, at any moment, the wings would enlarge and expand to be able to support the body. Neither happened! In fact, the butterfly spent the rest of its life crawling around with a swollen body and shriveled wings. It never was able to fly.

What the kind-hearted man did not understand was that the restricting cocoon and the struggle required for the butterfly to get through the tiny opening were Nature's way of forcing fluid（液体）from the body of the butterfly into its wings so that it would be ready for flight once it achieved its freedom from the cocoon.

Sometimes struggles are exactly what we need in our life. If we were allowed to go through our life without any hardships, it would fail us. We would not be as strong as what we could have been. And we could never fly.

【写作内容】

1.以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。

2.以约120个词就“个人成长需要艰难生活的磨砺”的主题发表看法，至少包含以下内容要点：

（1）你读了这个故事的感受；

（2）叙述当前父母溺爱子女的现象和由此造成的后果；

（3）假如你是父母的一方，你会如何磨砺自己的孩子？

【写作要求】

1.你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的观点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

【评分标准】概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

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Answer 1

A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen/ ease/ relieve the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the coccon, only to find that it could never fly because of his help.

The story sets me thinking a lot. Our life is more or less like this. Sometimes, struggles or obstacles in our life are a must for our growth. It is these struggles or hardships that increase our willpower and contribute to our success. Without these trials, we could never achieve our life goal just as the butterfly did in the story.

Nowadays, with only one child in most families, parents do whatever they can to satisfy the child’s needs and even do for him what should be done on his own. Consequently, the child is unable to look after himself without his parents’ presence. Too much care from parents rids children of their chances to grow strong by conquering obstacles. Just as a saying goes, “Flowers from a greenhouse can never withstand a storm”,

If I were a parent, I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any challenges. Besides, I would expose him to the hardships in life instead of protecting him from difficulties, providing them with chances to fight for his own bright future by overcoming difficulties

【解析】

试题分析：读写类书面表达是主要考查考生必须熟悉所读材料的整体结构与主旨大意，利用略读和检索阅读的方式寻求需求的信息，对文中信息进行有效筛选、整合和综合概括的能力。要求考生在阅读理解的基础上，对阅读信息进行二次理解、加工，归纳要点、整合零散信息，把加工后的信息准确有序的通过短文表达出来。首先，看清答题要求，尤其是“写作要求”后的具体要求，并在答题中一直自始至终贯彻其要求。应避免句式过于单一呆板，应该有长有短、错落有致；有抑有扬，使文章有很强的节奏感，这就要求懂得灵活运用富于变化的各种句式。例如强调句、倒装句、with复合结构、非谓语动词、恰到好处的被动句、高级的定语从句、what引导的主语从句等。

【亮点说明】这篇范文的特点是长句居多，句式富有变化，如：A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen/ ease/ relieve the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the coccon, only to find that it could never fly because of his help.这句话用了不定式做结果状语。It is these struggles or hardships that increase our willpower and contribute to our success. 这句话用了it做形式主语， Nowadays, with only one child in most families, parents do whatever they can to satisfy the child’s needs and even do for him what should be done on his own.这句话用了两个宾语从句， Too much care from parentss children their chances to grow strong by conquering obstacles. If I were a parent, I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any challenges. 这句话用了虚拟语气， I would expose him to the hardships in life instead of protecting him from difficulties, providing them with chances to fight for his own bright future by overcoming difficulties这句话用了现在分词做状语。 范文中还使用了谚语：Just as a saying goes, “Flowers from a greenhouse can never withstand a storm”,使文章中的观点更有说服力。

考点：考查读写类书面表达