Question

书面表达（满分25分）

 

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

Nowadays, it is not rare to see a man walk on the sidewalks, smartp hone in hand, completely absorbed in the digital world. Just as what computers once achieved, smartphones are transforming our life in every possible way—how we socialize, entertain, and study.

I used to contact friends by phone or QQ. But now I have switched to Wechat, a popular app that allows people to communicate and to share feelings and daily occurrence with fri ends. I can also receive the latest news by subscribing to famous websites. It makes me feel so connected with the rest of the world.

I am truly grateful for the convenience, connection and comfort brought by this marvelous technology. But meanwhile I feel deeply anxious. To stay informed, I constantly update my Wechat, for which I am often distracted. Therefore, we should be cautious not to fall slaves to the smart phones.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达要求就智能手机带来的影响以及你对这种影响的看法来进行写作。这个话题接近学生生活，学生可以自由发挥，发挥想象。但是需要自己组织好要点，同时要在谋篇布局上多加考虑，文章的结构层次要分明，脉络要清晰。在写作时，首先要选择自己熟悉的短语或者句型，在能力范围之内，选择句式时要赋予变化，这样才可以更好的驾驭。同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体。此外，文章要使用第一人称和一般现在时。

【亮点说明】本篇范文的特点是句式的多变和大量短语的运用，比如used to，subscribe to，switch to,feel connected with , stay informed, be absorbed in 等。句型结构有it做形式主语和过去分词做状语，：Nowadays, it is not rare to see a man walk on the sidewalks, smartphone in hand, completely absorbed in the digital world.，宾语从句 Just as what computers once achieved, smartphones are transforming our life in every possible way—how we socialize, entertain, and study.，定语从句 I contact friends by phone or QQ. But now I have switched to Wechat, a popular app that allows people to communicate and to share feelings and daily occurrence with friends.和不定式做目的状语和非限制性定语从句To stay informed, I constantly update my Wechat, for which I am often distracted.等，这些都成为文章的亮点所在。

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