Question

【题目】最近，我们学校新校规规定禁止学生在校园内使用手机，这引起了家长和同学们的热烈讨论。有人支持这个校规，认为使用手机会使学生分心，过度使用手机还会影响学生的健康。也有人反对这个校规，他们认为手机不仅便于家长和学生联系，而且还有其他的功能。

请写一篇短文反映出这些信息，并阐明自己的观点或态度。可适当增加内容使全文通顺流畅，字数120左右。（开头已经给出，不计入词数。）

Recently, our school has drawn up a new rule that mobiles shall not be used at school, which provokes a heated discussion.

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Answer 1

【答案】

Recently, Our school has drawn up a new rule that mobiles shall not be used at school, which provokes a heated discussion.

Some parents are happy with this rule. They believe multifunctional phones do distract students’ attention, which is supposed to be paid to studies. Besides, there is widespread concern that overuse of mobiles may cause some health problems like short sightedness, or hearing loss resulting from loud music from earphones.

However, some people find the rule hard to accept. As an important means of communication, mobiles bring great convenience to the contact between students and their parents. What’s more, mobiles can be very helpful tools, with which students can search for useful information they need.

Personally, it is not whether to ban mobiles at school that matters but how to use them. What the school should do is to guide students to be the masters of mobiles rather than the slaves.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于议论文，根据提示信息来阐明自己对校园内使用手机的观点。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象，行文要有逻辑和适当的连接词。 3、注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构，有恰当的连接词使得文章条理清晰。比如however,besides,what’s more等连接词的使用让文章看起来思路清楚，同时运用了许多高级词汇，如multifunctional表示多功能的，sightedness表示近视。句型多样，如which is supposed to be paid to studies是非限制性定语从句，还有it is not whether to ban mobiles at school that matters but how to use them.运用了not...but...句型。