Question

【题目】假设你的英文报纸Teens的编辑Collins, 读者李华写信告诉你他对高中学校生活的压力和父母整天的唠叨感到很厌烦，打算缀学外出打工，到社会上闯荡一下。 请用英文给他写一封信劝说他放弃这个念头并给出自己的建议。文章开头已给出，不计入总词数。

注意：

1．词数100左右；

2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3．参考词汇：闯荡 make a living away from home

Dear Li Hua,

This is Collins from Teens . I’m sorry to hear form you that youplan to drop out and find a job away from your parents.

Ours Sincerely

Collins

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Li Hua,

This is Collins from Teens. I’m sorry to hear from you that you plan to drop out and find a job away from your parents. It is a very dangerous idea for a teenager like you to intend to make a living away from home.

As a high school student, it is natural for us to meet problems in our school life. Both our teachers and parents show their love for us every day in the form of praises, criticisms or even complaints. We should be aware of it and grateful to it.

In my opinion, the most important duty for you today is to learn knowledge and learn how to deal with different difficulties at home and at school. To face the unknown world is our next step after graduation.

I hope my idea will be useful to you.

Ours Sincerely

Collins

【解析】

试题分析：本文是篇邮件应用文，本文是一篇劝说信，要注意语气符合自己的身份，以及注意劝说的语气，不能太过强硬，要注意以下几点：1、内容提示较简洁，只是框架，但学生容易把握写作要求和写作目的。考生在写作之前必修认真审题，首先要注意文章的时态；2、要注意给出自己的建议并且结合生活实际；3、再有就是不能根据材料逐字逐句的翻译应该注意句子的衔接，以提高作文的档次。

【亮点说明】文章符合劝说的语气和口吻，要点齐全，表达思路明确，知识点运用恰当到位，文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如drop out辍学，make a living生活，meet problems遇到困难，be aware of意识到，In my opinion在我看来等。还运用了一些好的句型，如 It is a very dangerous idea for a teenager like you to intend to make a living away from home运用了形式主语，To face the unknown world is our next step after graduation.非谓语动词做主语。文章的格式符合书信，结尾I hope my idea will be useful to you.表达了自己真心帮助的感情。