Question

【题目】自微信开发了红包电子支付以来，电子红包开始在中国手机用户中流行开来。借助网络时代的新方法，电子红包给中国传统红包赋予了新的意义。请针对这一现象，写120词左右的的作文。

内容应包括：

1．简要描述这一社会现象

2．分析微信红包的优缺点（方便，增添欢乐…过度沉迷，浪费时间…）

3．阐述你的看法

参考词汇：压岁钱：gifting money 微信：We Chat 电子红包： Red envelopes

电子支付：electronic payments

"Red envelope" fever has swept the country since We Chat came up with a program allowing users to send cash through electronic payments.________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

"Red envelope" fever has swept the country since We Chat came up with a program allowing users to send cash through electronic payments. This gives the traditions typical of this festive period a facelift as well as some problems.

On the one hand, the brilliant idea takes the Chinese New Year tradition of gifting money into the digital era, which makes gifting money convenient and more accessible to people. What’s more, it can bring people more fun and they can make their friendship with others closer. With electronic red envelopes, you're not limited by your identity or the time of year. On the other hand, electronic red envelopes also attract more teenagers and adults to become hooked on their phones, affecting their social or school life. They spend all their free time surfing and don’t concentrate on work.

In my opinion, "Red envelope" provides a brand new way of communication for people and obviously adds to more fun if used properly.

【解析】

试题分析：本文是提纲类作文，要点已给出，根据所给要点文章可分三段来写：第一段简要描述这一社会现象；第二段分析微信红包的优缺点，学生可结合自身实际写；第三段阐述自己的看法。写作时可适当增加细节以使行文连贯，同时要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺。同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。

【亮点说明】本文是一篇描述社会现象的短文，采用三段式，条理清晰，观点阐述明确，布局合理，文中使用高级句子。On the one hand, the brilliant idea takes the Chinese New Year tradition of gifting money into the digital era, which makes gifting money convenient and more accessible to people.运用非限制性定语从句；On the other hand, electronic red envelopes also attract more teenagers and adults to become hooked on their phones, affecting their social or school life.现在分词作结果状语；obviously adds to more fun if used properly.连词加过去分词作状语使用巧妙；另外，On the one hand, On the other hand, What’s more, In my opinion,的运用为文章增色添彩。