Question

2013年高考在即，高三学生目前正处在紧张复习迎考的氛围中。假如你叫李华，承德市某高中的高三学生，寒假之际，想和父母说说知心话，请你用英文在你的博客上给你父母写一封信。具体内容如下：

知心话
感　恩	关切鼓励，倾注爱心
对父母的期望	1. 多加交流，使自己保持良好状态
	2. 创造条件，给自己提供适时帮助
寒假打算	考生自拟(至少写出三点)

注意：1. 写作时注意格式；2. 词数不少于120；3. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
参考词汇： 高考 college entrance examination
Dear Mom and Dad,
Traditional Chinese Spring Festival is around the corner. On this special occasion, how I wish I could have a heart­to­heart talk with you.
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mom and Dad，
Traditional Chinese Spring Festival is around the corner. On this special occasion, how I wish I could have a heart­to­heart talk with you.
Through those years of my growing up, I always feel grateful to you for your unselfish help, care and love for me. Thanks to your constant encouragement, I have been making tremendous progress in my studies. It will be less than five months before I take the College Entrance Examination, which makes me under great pressure and need frequent support. You know, good studying conditions and timely help will do me a lot of good.
Mom and Dad, my dream is the very one you always have. I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am bearing. I plan to make a detailed study schedule for this coming winter vacation so that I can review lessons and practice solving problems of different subjects. It is also necessary that I do some physical training once in a while so that I can keep fit. If possible, as a family member, I will also help do some housework to make you relax a little bit.
I am quite confident of my future life and I do wish you good health and a happy new year.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

试题分析：考查提纲式作文：这是一篇高三学生写给父母的知心话，写好提纲式作文的关键是认真审题和分析所给的提纲，因此考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示，认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系，然后确定文章的主题、文体、人称和时态。根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等
【亮点说明】范文要点全面，句式多变： Thanks to your constant encouragement, I have been making tremendous progress in my studies.这句话用了thanks to多亏了， It will be less than five months before I take the College Entrance Examination, which makes me under great pressure and need frequent support. 这句话用了固定句型It will be +一段时间+before….，和非限制性定语从句， Mom and Dad, my dream is the very one you always have. I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am bearing. 这句话里面都省略关系代词的定语从句，I plan to make a detailed study schedule for this coming winter vacation so that I can review lessons and practice solving problems of different subjects. 这句话用了so…that…句型，It is also necessary that I do some physical training once in a while so that I can keep fit. 这句话用了it做形式主语，If possible, as a family member, I will also help do some housework to make you relax a little bit.这句话用了省略句， I am quite confident of my future life and I do wish you good health and a happy new year.这句话用了强调。