Question

【题目】假如你是某中学的学生Tom。前不久，你参加了全国英语演讲比赛并获得一等奖。请用英语给校刊写一篇文章，谈谈你的体会。内容主要包括：

1．付出才有回报；

2．收获自信和友谊；

3．感激之情。

注意 1．词数100左右；

2．可适当增加细节以使行文连贯；

3．开头语已为你写好，不计入总词数。

Looking back to the National English Speaking Competition I took part in several days ago，I have a lot to share with you．______________________________________________

Answer 1

【答案】

Looking back to the National English Speaking Competition I took part in several days ago, I have a lot to share with you.

Firstly，I feel really delighted that I’ve won the first prize in the competition , which makes me understand the true meaning of the proverb “No pains,no gains”. Besides, I’ve established the friendship with students from all over our country, from whom I’ve learned a lot.. More importantly, taking this competition has enabled me to overcome my fear of speaking in public, thus, developing my self-confidence. Additionally, I owe many thanks to my teachers and judges, without whose help I couldn’t have done such an excellent job.

To sum up, I will always treasure this meaningful and memorable experience.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于提纲作文，根据提示信息来谈谈自己参加全国英语演讲比赛并获得一等奖的体会。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确要点就是主要内容。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。本文写作时可以按照提示的三个方面的内容进行介绍。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时和现在完成时。 以第一人称为主。4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如which，from whom 和without whose help三个定语从句，还有taking this competition 和thus, developing my self-confidence2个动词的-ing形式做主语和状语以及without whose help I couldn’t have done such an excellent job.虚拟语气。此外，文章还使用了谚语No pains,no gains和短语如in public, owe to等。Besides，More importantly，Additionally和 To sum up,的使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。