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9．现代人越来越离不开手机．你在暑期社会实践活动中，对手机的使用进行了调查，发现很多人在开车、过马路时、…都在使用手机．针对这一现象，请你按下列要点用英语写一篇不少于100词的短文，呼吁人们文明使用手机．
1、描述这一社会现象；
2、你的观点和合理建议．
注意：文中不要出现学校及考生名字
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Answer 1

分析 高分句型
1．However，as is shown in a survey of social practice in summer vacation，an increasing number of people use mobile phones in improper situations，such as driving cars，crossing the roads or attending conferences．
然后，正如暑假期间做的一份社会实践调查结果一样，越来越多的人在不恰当的场合使用手机，比如开车途中，横穿马路时或者在开会时也在使用手机．
as引导的非限制性定语从句，表明现在的情况和暑期做的社会实践调查结果一样，非限制性定语从句是先行词的附加说明，去掉先行词也不会影响句意，将非限制性定语从句放在句子中间，前后都用逗号隔开．
2．Only when everybody has the awareness of the negative impacts of improper use of phones can we create a more civilized society．
only引导的倒装句，位于句首的only如果后面接副词、介词短语或从句等状语，则主句用倒装结构．但如果only后跟的是主语，则不需用倒装．此处使用倒装句，是为了强调人们需要意识到不当使用手机造成的负面影响的重要性．

解答 Mobile phones bring us a lot of convenience．（高分句型）However，as is shown in a survey of social practice in summer vacation，an increasing number of people use mobile phones in improper situations，such as driving cars，crossing the roads or attending conferences．Such inappropriate behavior is likely to bring bad consequences．On one hand，using mobile phones in this way may cause terrible accidents，which is really dangerous．On the other hand，talking loudly on the phone in public places is far from being polite．
    Personally，I think we shouldn't use mobile phones where attention or silence is needed，for instance，in libraries，hospitals，or in a plane．Besides，relevant laws are supposed to be passed in order to guide people's use of cell phones so that they will acquire good habits in public．（高分句型）Only when everybody has the awareness of the negative impacts of improper use of phones can we create a more civilized society．

点评 考生在写作此类提示内容较少的作文时，需要自己补充大量相关内容，先开门见山，提出要解决的问题和观点，再根据提纲写出主题句，依托主题句选择最合乎主题句的例子，写作时注意学会使用过渡词，恰当地使用过渡词，可避免结构松散，层次不明，表意不清等弊端．