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10．目前，许多学校对学生采取封闭式管理，学生对此看法不一．请根据下表所提供的信息，用英语写一篇100词左右的短文，客观地介绍讨论情况，并谈谈你的看法．

有的同学认为	有的同学认为
学校限制我们的自由；学生和社会接触少；学生的兴趣和爱好不能得到充分的发展．…	学校是学习知识的地方：学生应该安心在学校里学习；学生缺乏自觉性，离开了老师，可能会…
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Answer 1

分析 本文属于陈述正反方观点的议论文作文，主题是对学校对采取封闭式管理学生的不同观点，题目给出了大部分要点，也要考生给出自己的观点．文章结构清晰，先是一些同学反对的观点，然后赞同的观点，最后是自己的观点，要求考生用地道的英语表达自己的观点，要求观点明确，驾驭语言的能力强，选择词汇的时候要选择相对高级的词汇，也要运用多种句型，让文章更有变化．难度在于选择合适的词汇和句型表达文章需要的意思，可以变换使用一些容易驾驭的句子或者词汇实现同样的目的．在写作的时候要运用合适的连接词把要点串联起来，使文章成为一个整体．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构．比如不定式作真正的主语I feel it necessary to keep students at school for the focus on their study．是it作形式宾语，不定式作真正的宾语；．此外，文章还使用了大量短语get in touch with、put their heart into、lose control of等，使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯．
Some of the students think they enjoy less freedom and have little chance to get in touch with society．（高分句型一）
Some other think school is the best place to get knowledge so they should put their heart into their lessons．（高分句型二）
But at the same time schools should organize various activities so that students can enjoy their school life．（高分句型三）

解答 Nowadays a lot of schools keep their students in school all day long．Students have different opinions about it．Some of the students think they enjoy less freedom and have little chance to get in touch with society．（高分句型一）They are not able fully develop their interests and hobbies．Therefore，they have lost interest in their studies．
      Some other think school is the best place to get knowledge so they should put their heart into their lessons．（高分句型二）Some students lack the ability to control themselves．Once out of school，they may lose control of themselves and do something that will influence their studies．
      As far as I am concerned，it is necessary to keep students at school．But at the same time schools should organize various activities so that students can enjoy their school life．（高分句型三）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．