Question

【题目】假如你是李华。来自澳大利亚的交换生Kenton首次离家来中国读书，因生活上和语言交流上有困难，他萌生了回家的念头。不知如何是好的他在某网站上发帖求助，请你据此给他回帖。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Kenton,

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I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Kenton,

I am sorry to hear you have difficulty with life and communication abroad, but I am willing to help you out of the trouble.

To tell you the truth, it is natural that you are missing your parents and want to go home. But personally, I don’t think we can live with our parents all the life. Thus, it is a good chance for you to be more independent. You can call your parents more often instead of giving up your study.

If you don’t mind, I would like to be your friend. We can chat online frequently, which will improve your Chinese a lot. Only by communicating with others can you overcome your difficulties.

I am looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】首先审题，这篇文章要求假如你是李华。来自澳大利亚的交换生Kenton首次离家来中国读书，因生活上和语言交流上有困难，他萌生了回家的念头。不知如何是好的他在某网站上发帖求助，请你据此给他回帖。其次选用正确的人称和时态，用一般现在时、第二人称来写。然后写出单个句子，使用正确的连词，连句成段。具体来说，写这篇文章时，要注意:大体分三个段落来写，第一自然段说明自己愿意帮助他解决问题；第二自然段提出具体的解决方案并表示自己愿意和他交朋友；第三自然段期待他的答复。文中给出的细节都要包括，不要遗漏。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语，为文章增色不少，如: be willing to愿意，To tell you the truth说实话。还使用了宾语从句I am sorry to hear you have difficulty with life and communication abroad, but I am willing to help you out of the trouble.和主语从句To tell you the truth, it is natural that you are missing your parents and want to go home.提升了文章的整体水平。