Question

【题目】假如你是某外国语学校高二学生李华。近来，你发现很多同学课间休息时间坐在教室里学习。请你根据以下提示，用英语写信给校长反映这一问题，并呼吁同学们注意学习效率。

1. 反映问题；

2. 你的建议(至少两点)。

3. 总结文章并提出希望

注意：

1. 词数100左右；

2. 文中不得提及人名、校名及地名；

3. 信的开头已为你写好（不计入总词数）。

(ten-minute break between classes)课间休息

Dear Sir,

I am Li Hua, a senior 2 student in your school. I’m writing to tell you about a problem.

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir,

I am Li Hua, a senior 2 student in your school. I’m writing to tell you about a problem. At present, many students stay in the classroom to study during the ten-minute break between classes.

In my opinion, it is very important to take a break between classes. Otherwise students will feel tired both physically and mentally. During the ten-minute break, we can do something to get rid of tiredness. What we need is to have a real rest, instead of getting more exhausted. So relaxation in that period is really of great benefit to us.

As far as I’m concerned, to study effectively, we should combine our study with amusement; meanwhile, doing some sports is also a good way. As an old saying goes, “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.” Only in this way will we be able to study effectively.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】【名师点评】

本文属于提纲作文，本文只给出了一个话题，关于课间很多学生都在认真学习而不愿意休息。你认为这种做法是不明智的，因为课间就是让学生休息调整的，如果课间不休息，会大大影响上课的效率，反而是得不偿失。你的建议是不仅仅课间要休息，而且还要好好休息。

提纲作文难度在于谋篇布局，要根据题目要求作出合理的布局分段，在写作时要注意语法规则的合理运用，要选择合适的高级词汇和连接词让文章成为整体，变换使用多种句型，让文章更有变化。

本文亮点：本文首先亮出自己要反映的问题即本文的话题“At present, many students stay in the classroom to study during the ten-minute break between classes.”接着在第二段就此提出自己的看法“In my opinion, it is very important to take a break between classes. Otherwise students will feel tired both physically and mentally”用一个转折词“Otherwise”说明了问题的严重性。接着用一个单句和一个名词从从句“What we need is to have a real rest, instead of getting more exhausted.”再次强调课间休息的必要性，最终用一个“so ”结束第二段。最后一段用一个高级词汇“As far as I’m concerned,”再次重申自己的观点“to study effectively, we should combine our study with amusement; meanwhile, doing some sports is also a good way.”用一个分句使用了两个非谓语（to study effectively，doing some sports）让句式更丰富。再用一个由“as”引导的非限制性定语从句“As an old saying goes, “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.”引出一句习语“只工作不玩耍，聪明的孩子也变傻”。结尾用一个由“only”引起的一个倒装句“Only in this way will we be able to study effectively.”完美地结束。文章单句与复句交替使用，整个文章一气呵成，体现了对英语的驾驶能力。