Question

7．假定你是校园网站"交流"栏目的版主Tom，你校高二年级的同学Jack发来电子邮件，叙述因新学期分班离开原班级最好的朋友John，他担心距离会使友谊消失．请你根据以下提示发一封邮件 （150词左右） 给Jack，提出合理化建议．
1．Jack 的看法不完全正确；
2．应珍惜友谊，和朋友John约时间谈一谈自己的感受，并希望能够保持友谊．对方会因此而感动，也会珍惜友谊；
3．如果时间允许的话，相约课余或周末见面交流．
Hi，Jack，
I have already read your e-mail．
                                                        
Good luck!
Yours
Tom．

Answer 1

分析 题目要求以校园网站"交流"栏目版主Tom的身份，给同学Jack回一封电子邮件，并就Jack担心的问题给他提一些建议．写作的要点已经列出，写作时，注意行文的流畅和连贯．注意人称、时态、标点和语法知识的正确使用．多使用定语从句、名词性从句等，以增加作文的亮点．【亮点说明】范文使用了较多的宾语从句，如：what you are worrying about is not a big problem，explain that you feel…，and that you don't want this to happen；范文还使用了主语从句what you are worrying about；方式状语从句as if the two of you are growing apart；时间状语从句When students move between classes；另外，范文也使用了一些固定搭配，如seem to do sth，take their place，make an effort to，try doing，take some action等．范文不但用上了所给要点，也使用了一些复合句，显示出深厚的语法功底．

解答 Hi，Jack，
I have already read your e-mail．
I think what you are worrying about is not a big problem．When students move between classes old friendships often suffer as new ones seem to take their place．But it isn't always the case．If you truly value the friendship you should be able to make an effort to promote it．There is nothing to stop you spending time with your friend John．（高分句型） You can find him during the breaks between lessons or at some other time and explain that you feel as if the two of you are growing apart and that you don't want this to happen．（高分句型） He will most probably be very touched by this and try to keep the relationship with you．If he feels the same way you can arrange more time together after class or at weekends．The worst thing is just to worry about something but do nothing to make it right．（高分句型） Try taking some action!Good luck!
Yours
Tom．

点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感．（1）认真审题，确定体裁． （2）构思要点．根据题目要求，理解要表达的要点．设计好文章的层次段落，考虑所用时态、人称等，把要点串联起来，构成文章框架．（3）选词造句，避难选易．（4）认真检查，避免错误．仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致．