Question

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。
Diligence is the means by which one makes up for one’s dullness. If you are not good at something, you may as well practise it many times until you make it.
注意：
①无须写标题；     
②除诗歌外，文体不限；
③内容必须结合你生活中的一个事例；
④文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；
⑤词数不少于120；如引用提示语则不计入总词数。

Answer 1

One possible version：
As is universally acknowledged, practice makes perfect. Needless to say, practice is of great significance for us to challenge drawbacks and achieve success.
It remains fresh in my memory that there was a time when I suffered great frustration in learning English. Failing to master the new words, I gave way to despair, as a consequence of which my academic performance got from bad to worse. Fortunately, a scene that happened to a little boy changed me. At that time I accidentally found him practicing riding bicycle in the playground. Though constantly falling off the bicycle and in pain, he never abandoned it. Instead, he encouraged himself to practice over and over again. At length, he could ride skillfully. Inspired by him, I set about paying more attention and energy to practicing English words and sentences and eventually the progress achieved was considerable.
As is shown in the case above, only by practicing a lot can the flower of success blossom.

解析试题分析：根据提示判断本文属于话题作文。命题者在提示语中明确提出了话题diligence“勤奋”。由最后一句提示语 practise it many times until you make it 很容易联想到practice makes perfect“熟能生巧”这句话。这个话题很贴近学生的生活，所以在第二段联系实际事例时会相对轻松。当然在列举事例时要主要不要透露个人信息。描写完事例后可用几句话证明文章观点，以丰富文章主体部分。因为事例贴近生活，注意不要使用过于简单的词汇或短语或过多的口语，适当使用一些高级词汇和短语，会使文章提升档次。最后一段用两到三句话总结事例，点名主题。
【亮点说明】
本篇范文灵活使用各种句式如非限制性定语从句As is universally acknowledged，As is shown in the case above，定语从句a scene that happened to a little boy changed me,it作形式主语that引导真正的主语从句It remains fresh in my memory that there was a time when I suffered great frustration in learning English,倒装句 only by practicing a lot can the flower of success blossom等，使文章结构紧凑，同时也显示了作者对英语法语的熟练掌握。在文章第一段和最后一段句首使用as引导的非限制性定语从句，在结构上使得文章有序不凌乱。其次，在第一段引入谚语practice makes perfect是文章的亮点之一。再者，文章第二段现在分词作伴随状语的用法也很巧妙。如Failing to master the new words,Though constantly falling off the bicycle and in pain和Inspired by him。最后，文中高级词汇的使用如significance，At length，considerable也为文章整体层次的提示有很大贡献。