Question

【题目】假设你的朋友李华认为自己有点超重。作为好友，请你用英语给她/他写一个E-mail,建议她/他用适当的方法来减肥。

E-mail应该包括下列内容：

1、减肥的方法：每天运动，适当节食……

2、避免（avoid doing sth.)使用减肥药，不食用垃圾食品……

注意：1、E-mail的开头和结尾已经为你写好。

2、词数：100左右。

3、可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Li Hua

You say you want to lose weight but you are not sure how to do it correctly.

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Best wishes

Deng Ping

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Li Hua

You say you want to lose weight but you are not sure how to do it correctly.

I believe doing regular exercise is a good way to lose weight. It is important that you should do some sports for an hour every day. You may choose to do some running, play basketball, go swimming or go to a gym. You can also go for a long walk after supper.

At the same time, a balanced diet is also very helpful. You are supposed to have more fruits and vegetables and you’d better not eat any junk food, such as hamburgers and potato chips. They contain lots of fat in them. You should also avoid eating sweet foods. There is one more important thing to remember: it is not safe to take weight-loss pills, which have side-effects and do harm to your health.

I am sure you will feel better and look better in a few months if you keep regular exercise and go on a diet long enough.

Best wishes

Deng Ping

【解析】首先审题，假设你的朋友李华认为自己有点超重。作为好友，请你用英语给她/他写一个E-mail,建议她/他用适当的方法来减肥。任务中给出的提示信息包含如下内容：简述丢失和找回钱包的过程。抓住了这亮点，我们就抓住了文章的核心内容。其次选用正确的人称和时态，考虑用一般过去时，第一人称来写。然后写出单个句子，使用正确的连词，连句成段。具体来说，写这篇文章时，要注意:1、减肥的方法：每天运动，适当节食……

2、避免（avoid doing sth.)使用减肥药，不食用垃圾食品……可分四个自然段来写：第一自然段说明自己写信的目的；第二自然段说明运动减肥是一种很有效的方法；第三自然段说明均衡的饮食也很有益；第四自然段相信自己的好朋友会减肥成功。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语，为文章增色不少，如: At the same time同时，be supposed to应该。还使用了宾语从句I believe doing regular exercise is a good way to lose weight.和宾语从句I am sure you will feel better and look better in a few months if you keep regular exercise and go on a diet long enough.等多种句式结构，增加了文章的可读性。