Question

【题目】假如你是李华，你远在英国的朋友Smith从网上得知移动支付改变了中国人的生活方式。他想了解一些更详细的移动支付情况，请你根据下面要点提示，给Smith发一封电子邮件。

要点: 1.生活中的具体体现; 2.好处。

要求:词数100左右。

参考词汇:移动支付mobile payment

Dear Smith,

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Smith,

I'm Li Hua, a student in China. Knowing that you are eager to learn something more about Mobile Payment in China, I deeply welcome the opportunity to give you a brief introduction about it.

As you know, Mobile Payment has been a tendency in China. On the one hand, its convenience as well as efficiency makes it possible for us to take with us only a mobile phone rather than much cash, which saves us much time and trouble. On the other hand, Mobile Payment is widely used in our dailylife, like paying bills, booking tickets and so on. In a word, Mobile Payment is used in nearly everything and has really changed our life.

I will be very happy if my introduction can make you have a clear idea of Mobile Payment.

Kind regards.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇是应用文，通过回复邮件方式向好友描述移动支付在生活中的具体体现和好处。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时

结构：总分总

总分总指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，最后一段再进行总结升华，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1.表明自己乐意提供帮助

2.具体阐述移动支付在生活中的好处

1) 产生好处的具体例子1 (example 1)

2）产生好处的具体例子2 (example 2)

3) 总结升华在其他方面的影响。 (conclusion)

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

be eager to; a brief introduction; tendency; On the one hand… On the other hand;

第三步：连词成句

1. Knowing that you are eager to learn something more about Mobile Payment in China,

2. I deeply welcome the opportunity to give you a brief introduction about it.

3. Mobile Payment has been a tendency in China.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：On the one hand… On the other hand; In a word,

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改