Question

15．某英语报社向中学生征文，请你以"我理想的职业"为标题，根据下列要点完成短文．
1、职业特点；
2、选择的理由；
3、目前做何准备．
注意：1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．文章标题已给出．
My ideal job．I often imagine what I will be in the future．I hope I will work in a computer company as a program designer because I like designing the computer program and I will make enough time．I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues．I will do a good job in whatever I do．
I also hope that I won't be very busy so that I can spare time to company with my families．In my free time，I will contribute to take regular exercise，such asswimming，running and various ball games．
For my future ideal job，I am making every effort to make it．No matter how hard it is，I will go on trying hard and never give it up．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文，根据所提供的材料，写一篇征文，题目是"我理想的职业"．写作要点包括：职业的特点；选择的理由；目前做何准备．写作时应以一般现在时和一般将来时为主．人称以第一人称为主．重要短语：in the future （将来），a program designer （程序设计员），get along well with（相处很好），do a good job（做得很棒），spare time （腾出时间），company with （陪伴），make every effort to do sth （努力做某事），make it （做成功）．

解答 My ideal job
      I often imagine what I will be in the future．I hope I will work in a computercompany as a program designer because I like designing the computer program andI will make enough time．【高分句型】I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues．I will do a good job in whatever I do．（职业特点）
      I also hope that I won't be very busy so that I can spare time to company with myfamilies．In my free time，I will contribute to take regular exercise，such asswimming，running and various ball games．（选择的理由）
      For my future ideal job，I am making every effort to make it．No matter how hard it is，I will go on trying hard and never giveit up．【高分句型】（目前做何准备）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点，并适当增加细节．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．